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My first go - title "The Madman?"

padraiggg · 2009-10-21 12:23:50

Chapter 1 A man in a hat entered the room. He took off the hat. “It's you!” They all said. At the same time like a class speaking to a teacher. “Hahaha Hello gentleman”, the man in the hat said, putting the hat on the table. “And hello ladies he said. Turning to the ladies and lifting his hat politely. “Leave us alone…

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#362 20-01-2010 11:53pm
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padraigggg wrote: »

cheap knock-off post redacted

that wasnt me good effort though

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#363 21-01-2010 12:11am
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The plot thickens. 2 Padraiggg/gs!!!

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#364 21-01-2010 12:28am
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There can only be one. Extra-G, permaban-G.

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#365 21-01-2010 12:35am
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Well, they say imitation is a form of flattery.

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#366 21-01-2010 2:13am
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pickarooney wrote: »

There can only be one.

And his name is trent!;)

Genealogy Forum Mod

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#367 23-01-2010 11:31pm
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Again, if you have any feedback on the story, post it here.
If you have any opinions on the thread itself, or the way it's evolving, post them in Feedback.

(http://www.boards.ie/vbulletin/showthread.php?t=2055797673)

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#368 24-01-2010 1:39am
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whats this thread for so?

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#369 24-01-2010 1:50am
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mink_man wrote: »

whats this thread for so?

Its about a newly registered poster that wanted to have a go at writing. He has written I think 16 'chapters' now, but each chapter is no more than a very paragraphs. When you read the first chapter, you'll think your reading something from a 5th class student, but by the end of chapter 3 you'll be shouting SKRRK! SKRRK SKRRK! with joy as you marvel at such literary brilliance.

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#370 24-01-2010 1:24pm
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delly wrote: »

When you read the first chapter, you'll think your reading something from a 5th class student

Emm, Im not sure we've ruled this out yet? In any case, the adventures of Trent transcend any pre-conceived notions of age, gender(!) or creativity on the writers part.

Long may it continue. Padraig for Taoiseach (would sort those boyos in the Seanad out!)

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#371 24-01-2010 6:48pm
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new episdoe here

http://www.trentsadventures.com

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#372 24-01-2010 7:35pm
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The man was coming up to behind the bush now so Trent quickly pretended to be a mirror and the man stopped and started doing his hair. BANG! Trent shot the man!

ROFL

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#373 27-01-2010 1:35pm
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so is ther no more chapters?

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#374 27-01-2010 1:49pm
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You can't rush great art.

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#375 27-01-2010 2:55pm
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You sir are clearly a literary genius!

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#376 27-01-2010 4:16pm
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a pack of secretaries rushing over to the dead Trent double like a pack of cats rushing to some spilt milk. “hahaha have fun ladies ” he said to himself.

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#377 27-01-2010 5:17pm
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Trent dodged the bullets that were being shot at him and hid behind a bush he knew the man would follow him there like candy to a baby ‘come to poppa’ trent thought.

oh lord! feckin brilliant.

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#378 27-01-2010 11:32pm
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padraiggg wrote: »

new episdoe here

http://www.trentsadventures.com

Hi mexineil

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#379 28-01-2010 3:11am
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its narriated(sp) here

http://drop.io/trentchapter1/chronological

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#380 30-01-2010 3:03am
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can I say it's s*it without being banned?

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#381 30-01-2010 6:52am
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yes

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#382 30-01-2010 10:28am
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whiteboy wrote: »

can I say it's s*it without being banned?

Of course you can. It might carry more weight if you said why though.

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#383 03-02-2010 5:00am
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Now trent was coming up to the door of the submarine he could see a henchman guarding it trent guessed it was his first day on the job he was looking awkward and he didnt have the proper uniform on yet he was wearing his own jacket and not the blue one that all the normal henchmen had!

:D:D

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#384 10-02-2010 2:59pm
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Jesus Juice wrote: »

Ehhh, hello Steven Segal!?

Daniel Craig definitely!

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#385 11-02-2010 12:10am
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pickarooney wrote:

It's not a very good start, to be quite honest. If you don't know what's going to happen 5 lines into the book, maybe you should work that out first and then start (re)writing.

"Leave us alone Trent" ?? is this what someone who has a gun pointed at them says? How is he aiming both barrels (not bullets) at all the women at once and not at the men?

What's the story with the hat? It's on his head, then off, then on again... ?

"Now the gun was in the other hands"

This doesn't really read like English.

After 26 pages of Trent, I keep having a good laugh when I read pickarooney's genuine attempt at some proper constructive criticism. Rock'n'roll indeed!

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#386 11-02-2010 12:43am
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Looks like i missed a bit of action. Imposters?!

This is still brilliant.

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#387 11-02-2010 10:47am
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Valmont wrote: »

After 26 pages of Trent, I keep having a good laugh when I read pickarooney's genuine attempt at some proper constructive criticism. Rock'n'roll indeed!

Me too It's like some 30s critic's attempt to find sense or meaning in that stuff and nonsense the handsome chap with the quiff and wobbly hips is singing.

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#388 12-02-2010 12:52am
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This is like you've taken every rule about how not to write a novel and did exactly what you're not supposed to do!

And I've gotta say its ridiculous and extremely entertaining!!
Have just read the first two pages. But gotta read the rest over the weekend when I've got the time for such sorta nonsense!

OP, you should really look into publishing this thing. Might just become a best seller and then spawn a whole new generation of godawful books to be written...!

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#389 13-02-2010 6:21pm
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Where's Trent? I miss him:(

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#390 13-02-2010 8:11pm
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Just finished reading the lot.

I've gotta say padraiggg is a literary genius!!!
This is absolute rock and roll!!

I don't know how good a book this would make but I haven't read anything with so much blood, violence, sex and suspense in it. This is an absolute classic!!!

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#391 16-02-2010 11:48pm
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This thread has got to be the best way I've ever killed an hour. Padraiggg, I salute you. Trent is a godlike literary creation.

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