Can you rap? let the people decide

N05H3AD

if you think you have what it takes to be a rapper or like to make up your own raps then post them here and let people say what they think, simple as that.;)

N05H3AD

this is a rap i made a few weeks ago, it's pretty sh1te but, sure, what can you do. P.S i know the first bit is from Deep cover.

Tonight’s the night I’m getting in some sh1t, gon’ killin u niggaz coz I feel like it, this rap games a race ill shoot you in the face, leave your posse in disgrace, hav the police spraying mace, I don’t give a fúck, pickin’ hos up in my truck, my 24s spinnin, and that’s just the beginning, cruising in my chevvy with the top right down, I put hollow tips in clowns, I leave them in the ground, I havin you saying wow when I spit it on the mic, in the back of the limo geetin it on with some dikes, I give you what u like whether its for the gangstas or the bitches, my last album left a nigga makin riches, I could leave the game right now but I’m in far too deep.... that's as far as i got, it's a bit like a nursery rhyme really. ALL comments appreciated, good and bad...(most likely all bad)

aftermathcrew

N05H3AD wrote:

this is a rap i made a few weeks ago, it's pretty sh1te but, sure, what can you do. P.S i know the first bit is from Deep cover.

Tonight’s the night I’m getting in some sh1t, gon’ killin u niggaz coz I feel like it, this rap games a race ill shoot you in the face, leave your posse in disgrace, hav the police spraying mace, I don’t give a fúck, pickin’ hos up in my truck, my 24s spinnin, and that’s just the beginning, cruising in my chevvy with the top right down, I put hollow tips in clowns, I leave them in the ground, I havin you saying wow when I spit it on the mic, in the back of the limo geetin it on with some dikes, I give you what u like whether its for the gangstas or the bitches, my last album left a nigga makin riches, I could leave the game right now but I’m in far too deep.... that's as far as i got, it's a bit like a nursery rhyme really. ALL comments appreciated, good and bad...(most likely all bad)

i'll post later folks.that's good!!

N05H3AD

aftermathcrew wrote:

i'll post later folks.that's good!!

aftermathcrew has a gudun' lined up, wats better is he made it up in religion class!:D !:) !:D !

aftermathcrew

N05H3AD wrote:

aftermathcrew has a gudun' lined up, wats better is he made it up in religion class!:D !:) !:D !

your sig is good!!he makes this rap look like it is good.i'll post it later!!

Makaveli

You're from Wexford, and I'm guessing you're white, so why try to pretend to be a gangsta?

Aftermathcrew stop making stupid fúcking posts on every thread and for the love of God stop quoting every fúcking post you are replying to.

N05H3AD

Makaveli wrote:

You're from Wexford, and I'm guessing you're white, so why try to pretend to be a gangsta?

Aftermathcrew stop making stupid fúcking posts on every thread and for the love of God stop quoting every fúcking post you are replying to.

not pretendin' to be a gangsta i just like rap music, there would be no point in rapping about the cows and fields would there now also why would you be arsed givin' out about stupid things like quoting, why do you listen to rap if your white and your not from "the hood"? hey Orizio your no longer my least fav. mod, congrats

N05H3AD

i'm in a field, there's a cow......wow....now i'm on the road and i've fogotten my PIN code.......i remembered it it was something......oh there's another cow.....wow....and a sheep.....my phone rings, there's a bleep....it aftermathcrew saying he hates Makavelli too !:D !:) !:D !

Orizio

Tonight’s the night I’m getting in some sh1t, gon’ killin u niggaz coz I feel like it, this rap games a race ill shoot you in the face, leave your posse in disgrace, hav the police spraying mace, I don’t give a fúck, pickin’ hos up in my truck, my 24s spinnin, and that’s just the beginning, cruising in my chevvy with the top right down, I put hollow tips in clowns, I leave them in the ground, I havin you saying wow when I spit it on the mic, in the back of the limo geetin it on with some dikes, I give you what u like whether its for the gangstas or the bitches, my last album left a nigga makin riches, I could leave the game right now but I’m in far too deep.... that's as far as i got, it's a bit like a nursery rhyme really. ALL comments appreciated, good and bad...(most likely all bad)

Somebody please kill me now.

I guess we have another thing Wexford people can't do(besides play Hurling)

j2u

heres something i thought up myself,just messing about ,but even saying that im execting the usual widespread insults and all that,anyway here goes


now lets take it back to the beggining when
my head was spinning,when it didnt matter who was winning or losing
when i didnt know what to expect but was always anxious for what was gonna happen next,when things were great all love no hate,when things werent so complicated,im talking about when we first dated ,when we iniated,but now look where were situated,we`ve got each others heart abused and were both dissorientated and confused about the choices that we chose,about the steps that we take ,the mistakes that we make,am i expected to chase after this pretty face,when it could all just be a waste of my time when i could be home alone with a rhytm and a rhyme

aftermathcrew

ah...looks like i won't bother posting my rap no5h3ad.seeing as the two boys will probably start complaining again

aftermathcrew

lay off him orizio.it is his thread and he wants to post his rap on it.remember just because you are a moderator doesn't mean you can diss other people.oh and congrats, you have put me, and potential posters, off posting on this thread.don't bother saying "good" because you know that is about as immature as people get

Orizio

j2u wrote:

heres something i thought up myself,just messing about ,but even saying that im execting the usual widespread insults and all that,anyway here goes


now lets take it back to the beggining when
my head was spinning,when it didnt matter who was winning or losing
when i didnt know what to expect but was always anxious for what was gonna happen next,when things were great all love no hate,when things werent so complicated,im talking about when we first dated ,when we iniated,but now look where were situated,we`ve got each others heart abused and were both dissorientated and confused about the choices that we chose,about the steps that we take ,the mistakes that we make,am i expected to chase after this pretty face,when it could all just be a waste of my time when i could be home alone with a rhytm and a rhyme

Just a bit more like it. Bit flowery though.

The fact that anybody immediately equates being a rapper with materialism and gangsterism shows they should start listening to Dance music or Metal or some other crap where lyricism is irrelevent.Not having the originality to see past the abovew traits also shows a woeful lack of imagination and somebody who has only ever listened to one facet of Hip-Hop.

In sjort,stay away from the pen and the pad nowhateverthehellyournameis.

Orizio

aftermathcrew wrote:

lay off him orizio.it is his thread and he wants to post his rap on it.remember just because you are a moderator doesn't mean you can diss other people.oh and congrats, you have put me, and potential posters, off posting on this thread.don't bother saying "good" because you know that is about as immature as people get

Constructive criticism and all that. He asked what people think of his rhymes,I am telling him what I think.

People please remember this forum is for debating.

aftermathcrew

i don't listen to hip-hop.by the way when you were slagging me and no5h3ad about watching t.v, well i don't have a t.v.

j2u

what the hell kind of response is that??i dont mind u insulting it or giving me a bad response but in ENGLISH PLEASE,stop trying to sound intelligent talking in riddles like that,just say what u didnt like about it or if anything what u did .thats all i want from the rap i posted

aftermathcrew

i was talking to orizio.i like your rap though.sorry if i offended you but i was talking to "el duce"

Orizio

j2u wrote:

what the hell kind of response is that??i dont mind u insulting it or giving me a bad response but in ENGLISH PLEASE,stop trying to sound intelligent talking in riddles like that,just say what u didnt like about it or if anything what u did .thats all i want from the rap i posted

Just a bit more like it.;) Bit flowery though.

That was my reponse to you.

N05H3AD

<Personal attacks are against the rules>

aftermathcrew

yeah, well stop jeering us then.don't pretend you don't know what i am on about.constructive criticism my ****ing arse!!!

N05H3AD

<personal attacks are against the rules> well then abide by the rules orizio, also that's great just editing my posts coz i'm making a good point. also j2u's rap was class and you go saying it's flowery, try make a better one, it's obvious that he spent time making that

Orizio

So you would rather I just lied to the threadstarter then?

aftermathcrew

yeah you have put him off posting again

aftermathcrew

Orizio wrote:

So you would rather I just lied to the threadstarter then?

i would.you don't have to diss him.his rap was quality

Caryatnid

aftermathcrew - can you not post one post at a time instead of two within a few minutes? Why not try to get this thread back on topic and post your rap instead of complaining about other posts?

I think it's 'not true' to real rapping when Irish people (for example) rap about niggaz and chevvies and 'da hood'. Rapping is not just about saying a poem about the Bronx quickly. It's about expressing yourself and your own experiences. That's my opinion anyway. When I try to make up a rap (I'm crap btw, so I'm not going to post :rolleyes: ), the raps are about my own experiences. How can one rap and put feeling and emotion into something they haven't experienced?

N05H3AD

Orizio wrote:

So you would rather I just lied to the threadstarter then?

you didn't have to lie you could have said something less harsh, you just use your moderator status to boss people about and force people to accept your views and make fun of other peoples views i.e my liking of YB

aftermathcrew

Caryatnid wrote:

aftermathcrew - can you not post one post at a time instead of two within a few minutes?
that was accidental. myself and orizio posted simultaeneously!!

N05H3AD

Caryatnid wrote:

aftermathcrew - can you not post one post at a time instead of two within a few minutes? Why not try to get this thread back on topic and post your rap instead of complaining about other posts?

I think it's 'not true' to real rapping when Irish people (for example) rap about niggaz and chevvies and 'da hood'. Rapping is not just about saying a poem about the Bronx quickly. It's about expressing yourself and your own experiences. That's my opinion anyway. When I try to make up a rap (I'm crap btw, so I'm not going to post :rolleyes: ), the raps are about my own experiences. How can one rap and put feeling and emotion into something they haven't experienced?

yeah that is a good oppinion, maybe i would have been better off not starting this thread at all, i just thought that people could be influenced by the type of music they listen to and be inspired to write similar stuff.

Orizio

Fine.

Back to posting lyrics or else this thread gets locked.

Makaveli

j2u wrote:

heres something i thought up myself,just messing about ,but even saying that im execting the usual widespread insults and all that,anyway here goes


now lets take it back to the beggining when
my head was spinning,when it didnt matter who was winning or losing
when i didnt know what to expect but was always anxious for what was gonna happen next,when things were great all love no hate,when things werent so complicated,im talking about when we first dated ,when we iniated,but now look where were situated,we`ve got each others heart abused and were both dissorientated and confused about the choices that we chose,about the steps that we take ,the mistakes that we make,am i expected to chase after this pretty face,when it could all just be a waste of my time when i could be home alone with a rhytm and a rhyme

I like it. Easily related too, decent word play and it has flow to it.


noshead, if you think liking rap means being a gangster you really need to snap out of it. Nobody is going to take you seriously if your lyrical content revolves around niggas, bitches, money and drive bys.

Caryatnid

N05H3AD wrote:

yeah that is a good oppinion, maybe i would have been better off not starting this thread at all, i just thought that people could be influenced by the type of music they listen to and be inspired to write similar stuff.

Hey hey, no way! I think it was a good idea to start this thread. I'm not saying that we shouldn't write rap - I was just talking about the rap-topic. It's definitely ok to be influenced by music and other people.
Influence is good in music.
Dominence is bad.

j2u

thanx to everybodys opinions,i was just annoyed because i didnt know exactly what orizo was saying by the way he was saying it,but like i said i appreciate both good and bad opinions on it,thanx

Orizio

I liked your rhyme btw,if you didn't happen to catch that.

dar83

J2u, nice. Some proper stuff going on there.

The other effort..... the less said the better.

I've got a gat/ look at that/hoes all on my dcik/makin my chevy 4 door look sick/ etc....

Where do I sign?

evil_seed

My rhymes are so tight, you'd think i'm a jew,
My flow can't be beat, dude i'm just better than you,
The way i spit my words off the top off my brain,
have everybody up on these boards like "yo this cats insane"
Cos its seed muhfukas, like y'all aint know,
can't no one replace me cos i'm runnin the show,
Foes is skatin from me, hoes be waitin on me, and i couldn't give 2 ****s if everybody hatin on me
but i know i aint' a gangsta, never shot a gun or pushed weight,
the only weight i know about is what i gain from a plate

N05H3AD

i like that...alot:D

evil_seed

cheers. i might drop a few more lines if others do.:rolleyes:

aftermathcrew

nice.i'd like to hear more.nice work

evil_seed

not as good, but here ......

yo, i'ma do me, you try do you
you think you can walk the walk, then walk in my shoes
cos my rhymes are intergaltical,
fool you need to go back to school,
then you'll find the time
to learn how to rhyme.
i'm the one like neo, like jet li i'm a hero
how do i know this.. yo, cos my bank account has so many zero's

Sm0ke

ur lacking a solid flow and u need to work on your rhyming.

Evil Seed lacks the guts- never gonna top me, see?
you know I got this **** in the bag... like a colostomy
now quite obviously- I'm torchin' these fruits
have you like western fans... way you'll worship the duke
cuz everyone knows I'm best- but u keep it bottled inside
so I'LL write 'esteem' on My dick... n make u swallow ya pride

lol just messing with ya!

evil_seed

Sm0ke wrote:

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lol just messing with ya!

we'll leave the battle raps for another day

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lets go back to the days when hip hop was more fun,
no bling bling, no bitches and no guns,
when beef was just meat, deep messages that were sweet,
and run dmc rocked adidias on they feet.
cos it was all fun back then,
in the days back when,
you spent time in the pen,
you was writing rhymes in ur den.
can't y'all see whats happenin,
with these fakes that are rappin and,
they saying somethin without sayin anythin

Makaveli

Sm0ke wrote:

so I'LL write 'esteem' on My dick... n make u swallow ya pride

I lol'ed. If that line is your own and not bitten then fair play to you. Funny stuff. Good work.

Damage

Can i rap?,ill let the people decide,cos im white,not a gangsta i've got nthin to hide,i live in a village not a city or a slum,but if theres trouble ill def-i-nitely come.To back up my side,to show my pride and never turn my back or never run and hide.If i was to live for tomorrow and a day,id only make sure that ye all hear what i say,To rap,its not black,not white or not anything,it dont gotta be harsh,not cruel or menacing,you gotta have the flow,the right words to throw,to spit the only truth that you ever will know.This rap sh1t you love it,no other question of it and if they took it from you then you'd have to rise above it,to find a way,those lyrics that you spray,take time to pray for just another day,to show yourself what you really can do,Can I really rap?Its all up to YOU!!

Maybe the first rap i have ever actually put down on "paper" or anythin so let me know.The beat to it may be a bit strange just try and fit a beat to it.

Ay Cee

N05H3AD wrote:

this is a rap i made a few weeks ago, it's pretty sh1te but, sure, what can you do. P.S i know the first bit is from Deep cover.

Tonight’s the night I’m getting in some sh1t, gon’ killin u niggaz coz I feel like it,

Just curious as to how many "niggaz" you hang with and if you refer to them as such?

spacecoyote

just wanted to go back to a point N05H3AD made earlier about rapping about "niggaz" cos what else could he rap about being from ireland? Just wondered out of curiosity if he'd listened to any Irish hip-hop? Because you might be surprised to find that there's plenty of subject matter that Irish rappers have found to deal with through their music based on their lives in Ireland. They rap in their own dialect, using their own slang, about their own experiences and thats what works. Try listening to some, if you're looking for somewhere to start as an MC

Ay Cee

www.thegudmen.com
www.myspace.com/mcaycee
www.myspace.com/thegudmen
Might be a start

spacecoyote

I set 'em up...

Ay Cee wrote:

www.thegudmen.com
www.myspace.com/mcaycee
www.myspace.com/thegudmen
Might be a start

(^^^shameless plug )

you knock em down

Ay Cee

You know how we do dawg, pimpin' aint ez

spacecoyote

fo' sho' mo-fo, i know how it go

Sm0ke

Makaveli wrote:

I lol'ed. If that line is your own and not bitten then fair play to you. Funny stuff. Good work.

i always google peoples **** if i think their biting

ty!

N05H3AD

spacecoyote wrote:

just wanted to go back to a point N05H3AD made earlier about rapping about "niggaz" cos what else could he rap about being from ireland? Just wondered out of curiosity if he'd listened to any Irish hip-hop? Because you might be surprised to find that there's plenty of subject matter that Irish rappers have found to deal with through their music based on their lives in Ireland. They rap in their own dialect, using their own slang, about their own experiences and thats what works. Try listening to some, if you're looking for somewhere to start as an MC

i actually said rapping about Wexford and I live out in the country so I (personally) couldn't think of other raps and also i have explained my rap if you look a few posts back, maybe i will think of a proper "Irish" rap to get people off my back!!!!