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What kind of script would you write for a 5 min short film?

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  • #32
    DyldeBrill
    Registered Users, Registered Users 2 Posts: 1,406 ✭✭✭DyldeBrill


    Chuck Stone wrote: »
    Once upon a time they all lived happily ever after.

    Fin.

    I'd be hoping for at least a Bafta off this script!


  • #33
    ejmaztec
    Registered Users, Registered Users 2 Posts: 24,369 ✭✭✭✭ejmaztec


    Five minutes of Brendan O'Carroll standing there with his underpants down his ankles, and the title "Mrs Brown's Lad".


  • #34
    Doc Ruby
    Registered Users, Registered Users 2 Posts: 3,956 ✭✭✭Doc Ruby


    DyldeBrill wrote: »
    Well I'm in between two stories so I have 2 written out.Hoping to get about 12 scenes max out of this 5 mins, but I can stretch it to 7

    My first script is a man who is a helper who looks after the disabled.He is a heavy drinker, lives on his own and has never been married.He mistreats these people that he looks after, pushing them, insulting them, he basically has no time for them.


    Then the break in the story is when he goes drink driving and has an unfortunate crash where he finds out that he has lost the use of his legs.As there is no one else to look after him, he is made go into a home, like the one he worked in where he is stuck with a minder that was equally as nasty as him.

    The shots of this will really tell you more, this is a brief outline of it.There wont be much talking in it and I'm thinking of having the protagonist as a narrator, from start to end.
    This was already made, Danny Trejo starring.


  • #35
    thebigbiffo
    Registered Users, Registered Users 2 Posts: 2,941 ✭✭✭thebigbiffo


    ok, I'll tell you what NOT to write. this is the general gist of final film project from college...

    boy meets girl in nightclub where everyone's smashed on E
    boy brings girl back to gaff
    boy cant get it up
    girl laughs at him and leaves
    boy is embarrassed and looks like he'll never do drugs again

    now, when i was 21 i'd just come off about 3 years munching yokes like they were smarties and this script - at the time - seemed like some sort of deep symbolic tale of how soft drugs actually can have a bad effect on your life and state of mind....

    what it came out as was a tale of how a lad couldn't get it up.

    :o

    dont know what i was thinking. and to top it off, i couldn't use the soundtrack i wanted due to the editor we worked with having a limited selection. so i ended up with mostly blondie instead of the f'ucked up, scarily atmospheric techno i wanted.


  • #36
    ChippingSodbury
    Registered Users, Registered Users 2 Posts: 1,396 ✭✭✭ChippingSodbury


    Chuck Stone wrote: »
    Once upon a time they all lived happily ever after.

    Fin.

    You could spice it up with a love interest:
    Once upon a time, boy meets girl, boy asks girl to marry him, girl says 'No' and they both live happily ever after


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  • #37
    DyldeBrill
    Registered Users, Registered Users 2 Posts: 1,406 ✭✭✭DyldeBrill


    thebigbiffo wrote: »
    ok, I'll tell you what NOT to write. this is the general gist of final film project from college...

    boy meets girl in nightclub where everyone's smashed on E
    boy brings girl back to gaff
    boy cant get it up
    girl laughs at him and leaves
    boy is embarrassed and looks like he'll never do drugs again

    now, when i was 21 i'd just come off about 3 years munching yokes like they were smarties and this script - at the time - seemed like some sort of deep symbolic tale of how soft drugs actually can have a bad effect on your life and state of mind....

    what it came out as was a tale of how a lad couldn't get it up.

    :o

    dont know what i was thinking. and to top it off, i couldn't use the soundtrack i wanted due to the editor we worked with having a limited selection. so i ended up with mostly blondie instead of the f'ucked up, scarily atmospheric techno i wanted.
    hahaha god I'd say the blonde music was a pain in the arse! Luckily I'm my own editor so I can put what ever I like in


  • #38
    kylith
    Registered Users, Registered Users 2 Posts: 17,745 ✭✭✭✭kylith


    This thread should be called 'Do my Filmmaking course homework'.


  • #39
    Doc Ruby
    Registered Users, Registered Users 2 Posts: 3,956 ✭✭✭Doc Ruby


    One I've always wanted to try would be a scene in a hospital, doctors and nurses rushing around, and a young woman spattered in blood and spasming on the operating table.

    The soundtrack would be a variable ringing in the ears and muffled voices talking about the accident and various bits of medical jargon and machines binging away. The camera perspective switches between closeups of her and her view of things.

    Before the screening you tell everyone to wait till the end, its very important, then go have a cup of tea.

    Then after about 30 seconds of this, her eyes close, and the camera angle is from inside her eyes closing. In darkness, the noises become more muffled and finally stop. The next 4 minutes are darkness and silence.

    Probably a complete bust but great craic all the same. :D


  • #40
    Chuck Stone
    Closed Accounts Posts: 13,029 ✭✭✭✭Chuck Stone


    ChippingSodbury wrote: »
    You could spice it up with a love interest:
    Once upon a time, boy meets girl, boy asks girl to marry him, girl says 'No' and they both live happily ever after

    I dunno. People have very short attent....

    ...oh look, a kitten on TV.


  • #41
    DyldeBrill
    Registered Users, Registered Users 2 Posts: 1,406 ✭✭✭DyldeBrill


    kylith wrote: »
    This thread should be called 'Do my Filmmaking course homework'.

    ah I have it nearly done now! With all these great ideas coming in from everyone I could mix a bit of romance between a boy and girl, he gets rejected, takes his da's car out, crashes it into a wall, and then have a random porno with blondie music as the soundtrack.GOLDEN!


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  • #42
    Seachmall
    Registered Users, Registered Users 2 Posts: 7,041 ✭✭✭Seachmall


    DyldeBrill wrote: »
    crashes it into a wall

    In slow-motion!

    I don't think you appreciate the significance of the slow motion crash.

    Maybe you're just not the right man for the job...


  • #43
    simonmln
    Registered Users, Registered Users 2 Posts: 205 ✭✭simonmln


    A man in a hat entered the room. He took off the hat. “It's you!” They all said. At the same time like a class speaking to a teacher. “Hahaha Hello gentleman”, the man in the hat said, putting the hat on the table. “And hello ladies he said. Turning to the ladies and lifting his hat politely. “Leave us alone Trent!” The women said. Perhaps it was because the were angry at him for something he had done in the past, a long, long time ago. Or perhaps it was because he was holding a gun at them! The gun came from nowhere. He had got it out of his pocket and now both bullets were aimed at the people.”Say your prayers!” The man said but one of the men grabbed the gun, knocking the table with the hat on it and some other things on the floor. A vase got broken. Now the gun was in the other hands and we would have to wait and see if it was the right hands.


  • #44
    Seachmall
    Registered Users, Registered Users 2 Posts: 7,041 ✭✭✭Seachmall


    Plagiarism just ain't cool, man.


  • #45
    cynder
    Registered Users, Registered Users 2 Posts: 4,128 ✭✭✭cynder


    Toast, one sided, double sided, done on an open fire, grilled or done in a toaster. Can call it toast master....


  • #46
    DyldeBrill
    Registered Users, Registered Users 2 Posts: 1,406 ✭✭✭DyldeBrill


    Seachmall wrote: »
    In slow-motion!

    I don't think you appreciate the significance of the slow motion crash.

    Maybe you're just not the right man for the job...

    hmmm maybe your right


    maybe Im not the right guy! But by all means send that script to Hollywood! you have a banker there!


  • #47
    ChippingSodbury
    Registered Users, Registered Users 2 Posts: 1,396 ✭✭✭ChippingSodbury


    Or here's another:
    Boyfriend and sporty girlfriend are having an argument. Her period is late: she thinks she might be pregnant. Boyfriend says "Well who did you sleep with because it wasn't me, I'm a Jaffa". She pleads with him that she hasn't been sleeping around but he's having none of it. He storms off. She's heartbroken so goes to the swimming pool for a swim ('cos she's sporty and it's winter!). Suddenly, from nowhere, her period starts and leaves a trail behind her. Suddenly, from the other nowhere, a shark appears and eats her. The authorities call the boyfriend to tell him the sad news. Devastated, he loses control of the car and crashes, slow motion, into the wall. There's slow motion smoke everywhere and Blondie playing on the radio.
    I think it all hangs together well except I can't seem to find a good reason why Blondie might be playing on the radio...


  • #48
    John Doe1
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    1st scene: guy walking down lonely country lane in winter. close up of actor with a melancholic expression.
    2nd scene: a black crow lands on his shoulder. Man looks forlorn
    3rd scene: Man dies of hypothermia


  • #49
    DyldeBrill
    Registered Users, Registered Users 2 Posts: 1,406 ✭✭✭DyldeBrill


    ChippingSodbury wrote: »
    Or here's another:
    Boyfriend and sporty girlfriend are having an argument. Her period is late: she thinks she might be pregnant. Boyfriend says "Well who did you sleep with because it wasn't me, I'm a Jaffa". She pleads with him that she hasn't been sleeping around but he's having none of it. He storms off. She's heartbroken so goes to the swimming pool for a swim ('cos she's sporty and it's winter!). Suddenly, from nowhere, her period starts and leaves a trail behind her. Suddenly, from the other nowhere, a shark appears and eats her. The authorities call the boyfriend to tell him the sad news. Devastated, he loses control of the car and crashes, slow motion, into the wall. There's slow motion smoke everywhere and Blondie playing on the radio.
    I think it all hangs together well except I can't seem to find a good reason why Blondie might be playing on the radio...
    Its actually a fact that blondie has been the cause of many accidents.Something eerie about that biatch


  • #50
    ejmaztec
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    Five minutes could be used to show anything that was any good throughout the entire second series of "The Walking Dead, including 4 minutes and 30 seconds for the credits.


  • #51
    Capt'n Midnight
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    I'd be pushing for an art grant so

    It would be an experimental work inspired by the style of Derek Jarman's Blue, but I feel confident of sourcing other visuals. The sound track would seem similar to John Cage's 4′33″ but would actually be based on Alphonse Allais's 1897 Funeral March for the Obsequies of a Deaf Man for copyright reasons.

    I'd give it a title of with six Hexadecimal characters, for the whole arty-techno thing


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  • #52
    minidazzler
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    DyldeBrill wrote: »

    My first script is a man who is a helper who looks after the disabled.He is a heavy drinker, lives on his own and has never been married.He mistreats these people that he looks after, pushing them, insulting them, he basically has no time for them.

    I'm just saying except for the living alone bit, that is me, I will sue you for basically stealing my life and putting it on film. :pac:


  • #53
    simonmln
    Registered Users, Registered Users 2 Posts: 205 ✭✭simonmln


    Seachmall wrote: »
    Plagiarism just ain't cool, man.

    Not plagiarism, just wanted to get the word back out for this masterpiece. I take no credit for it.


  • #54
    AngryBollix
    Closed Accounts Posts: 2,536 ✭✭✭AngryBollix


    Get a fanny into it and youll be up for an oscar nomination


  • #55
    Gingermagic
    Closed Accounts Posts: 34 ✭Gingermagic


    No script....make it a silent movie....saves on the hassle and as we hear you can get an oscar for best script on a silent film...whoulda known lol


  • #56
    44leto
    Closed Accounts Posts: 4,137 ✭✭✭44leto


    He Saw he came and he drilled her.

    The best porno is usually 5 minutes long and killer dialog is not necessary and it will be watched.


  • #57
    token101
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    Holes: Gravedigger who moonlights as a pornstar. :cool:


  • #58
    Sonnenblumen
    Registered Users, Registered Users 2 Posts: 5,834 ✭✭✭Sonnenblumen


    DyldeBrill wrote: »
    I'm currently writing a script at the moment for a proposed short film.Nearly there, but I have absolute writers block! It'll come though!

    Share your ideas here, might give me a bit of inspiration.I can tell you the storyline of mine too, if you are interested :)

    How about an angstridden aspiring scriptwriter is offered a big opportunity but is suffering writer's cramp and facing an impending but very important deadline for a new script. Deciding against better judgement, willingly becomes embroiled initially but unknowingly online with shady characters who have managed to set a devious trap under the pretence of offering help.

    All starts well until relentless and cunning deceit takes hold, and..... well you can guess the rest...:eek:


    PS are you writing a script for Paddy S?


  • #59
    paddy kerins
    Site Banned Posts: 1,856 ✭✭✭paddy kerins


    Man getting hit in groin with football


  • #60
    acidskiffle
    Closed Accounts Posts: 954 ✭✭✭acidskiffle


    Disliked fat man gets bludgeoned to death with balls of own sh1t.


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  • #61
    Capt'n Midnight
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    Gingermagic wrote: »
    No script....make it a silent movie....saves on the hassle and as we hear you can get an oscar for best script on a silent film...whoulda known lol
    waaayyy ahead of you on that one :p


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