What kind of script would you write for a 5 min short film?

DyldeBrill · 09-02-2012 04:01PM #1

I'm currently writing a script at the moment for a proposed short film.Nearly there, but I have absolute writers block! It'll come though!

Share your ideas here, might give me a bit of inspiration.I can tell you the storyline of mine too, if you are interested

ChippingSodbury · 09-02-2012 04:02PM

What kind of script would I write? A short one...

davet82 · 09-02-2012 04:03PM

all i can think of is porn when it comes to short films, sorry dude

Sindri · 09-02-2012 04:04PM

Give us the storyline and the premise and that. Most important thing about a movie is the cinematography and that.

CardBordWindow · 09-02-2012 04:06PM

The scene opens, there's a guy sitting on a chair watching telly. He's laughing at what he sees. Suddenly, he develops a case of spontaneous human combustion!
Que a 90 second agonising death scene, followed by 2.5/3 minutes of credits.

Fin

Seachmall · 09-02-2012 04:07PM

He was an outcast, discarded by his family and rejected by his friends. He travelled the streets as a loner feared by all those who knew his name and soon to be feared by those who didn't. His emotions were empty, his innoncence lost. In a world of contempt and solitude there could only ever be one solution...

...FACEKICKER!

Coming to a screen near you.

smash · 09-02-2012 04:07PM

Someone taking a dump and reading the paper.

minidazzler · 09-02-2012 04:08PM

Since it's a short film it's probably gonna be pretentious and artsy, so very little dialogue and lots of implied words and emotions.

Standard Toaster · 09-02-2012 04:09PM

I'd have to secure Warwick Davis and Danny DeVito first.

Fozzydog3 · 09-02-2012 04:12PM

You might want to reconsider your course if you need to go on AH for help

SEPT 23 1989 · 09-02-2012 04:12PM

Man running against the traffic on the fast lane of the M50

DyldeBrill · 09-02-2012 04:12PM

Well I'm in between two stories so I have 2 written out.Hoping to get about 12 scenes max out of this 5 mins, but I can stretch it to 7

My first script is a man who is a helper who looks after the disabled.He is a heavy drinker, lives on his own and has never been married.He mistreats these people that he looks after, pushing them, insulting them, he basically has no time for them.

Then the break in the story is when he goes drink driving and has an unfortunate crash where he finds out that he has lost the use of his legs.As there is no one else to look after him, he is made go into a home, like the one he worked in where he is stuck with a minder that was equally as nasty as him.

The shots of this will really tell you more, this is a brief outline of it.There wont be much talking in it and I'm thinking of having the protagonist as a narrator, from start to end.

foxyboxer · 09-02-2012 04:13PM

An award winning one.

Sindri · 09-02-2012 04:14PM

Personally I always thought Eveline Joyce's short story from Dubliners would make a brilliant short film.

Very little dialogue, just the chance for some good imagery.

DyldeBrill · 09-02-2012 04:14PM

Fozzydog3 wrote: »

You might want to reconsider your course if you need to go on AH for help

I'm doing pretty good in college thank you! I'm interested to hear what others would write.I have my story nearly done sure

Standard Toaster · 09-02-2012 04:14PM

Best short I've seen in a while OP

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GS5bjMYtLNc

davet82 · 09-02-2012 04:14PM

SEPT 23 1989 wrote: »

Man running against the traffic on the fast lane of the M50

hmmm.... i reckon that'd only last 20 seconds the most

SEPT 23 1989 · 09-02-2012 04:14PM

DyldeBrill wrote: »

Well I'm in between two stories so I have 2 written out.Hoping to get about 12 scenes max out of this 5 mins, but I can stretch it to 7

My first script is a man who is a helper who looks after the disabled.He is a heavy drinker, lives on his own and has never been married.He mistreats these people that he looks after, pushing them, insulting them, he basically has no time for them.

Then the break in the story is when he goes drink driving and has an unfortunate crash where he finds out that he has lost the use of his legs.As there is no one else to look after him, he is made go into a home, like the one he worked in where he is stuck with a minder that was equally as nasty as him.

The shots of this will really tell you more, this is a brief outline of it.There wont be much talking in it and I'm thinking of having the protagonist as a narrator, from start to end.

Is that not part of his job description?

Seachmall · 09-02-2012 04:15PM

DyldeBrill wrote: »

Well I'm in between two stories so I have 2 written out.Hoping to get about 12 scenes max out of this 5 mins, but I can stretch it to 7

My first script is a man who is a helper who looks after the disabled.He is a heavy drinker, lives on his own and has never been married.He mistreats these people that he looks after, pushing them, insulting them, he basically has no time for them.

Then the break in the story is when he goes drink driving and has an unfortunate crash where he finds out that he has lost the use of his legs.As there is no one else to look after him, he is made go into a home, like the one he worked in where he is stuck with a minder that was equally as nasty as him.

The shots of this will really tell you more, this is a brief outline of it.There wont be much talking in it and I'm thinking of having the protagonist as a narrator, from start to end.

Sounds gay. Skip the start and go straight the crash scene. Do a load of slow motion and bullet-time effects. End sounds gay too, skip that part as well.

DyldeBrill · 09-02-2012 04:16PM

minidazzler wrote: »

Since it's a short film it's probably gonna be pretentious and artsy, so very little dialogue and lots of implied words and emotions.

Agreed! Thats what I'll be doing.Just trying to figure out the scenes to put lines into

Seachmall · 09-02-2012 04:18PM

DyldeBrill wrote: »

Agreed! Thats what I'll be doing.Just trying to figure out the scenes to put lines into

"AAAAAAAAAAAWWWWWWWWWWWW sshhit!" just before the crash scene.

That's all you need, homeboy.

Fozzydog3 · 09-02-2012 04:18PM

DyldeBrill wrote: »

I'm doing pretty good in college thank you! I'm interested to hear what others would write.I have my story nearly done sure

a roma gypsy on the dole gets pissed on ?

DyldeBrill · 09-02-2012 04:18PM

Standard Toaster wrote: »

Best short I've seen in a while OP

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GS5bjMYtLNc

Its a wonderful short film! It'd be up there in my top 10

smash · 09-02-2012 04:19PM

DyldeBrill wrote: »

My first script is a man woman who is a helper who looks after the disabled.He is a heavy drinker, lives on his own and has never been married. She is a leggy brunette with a rack to die for. He mistreats She teases these people that he she looks after, pushing them, insulting them, he basically has no time for them flicking the bean in front of them, lap dances, she basically leaves them ready to explode.

Then the break in the story is when he goes drink driving and has an unfortunate crash where he finds out that he has lost the use of his legs.As there is no one else to look after him, he is made go into a home, like the one he worked in where he is stuck with a minder that was equally as nasty as him one of the patients regains use of all his motor skills and rides the arse off her.

The shots of this will really tell you more, this is a brief outline of it.There wont be much talking in it and I'm thinking of having the protagonist as a narrator 70's porn music playing, from start to end.

That sounds much better!

Sindri · 09-02-2012 04:20PM

Doesn't matter at all about dialogue.

Watch an Ingmar Bergman film and you'll have your answer. You want art? Cries and Whispers. And then just have the protagonist stare into the camera as you go in for a close up for a melodramatic finish.

DyldeBrill · 09-02-2012 04:20PM

BINGO!

JerryHandbag · 09-02-2012 04:22PM

I'd write a script about the band The Script, and how they get hacked to death by a gang of Slipknot fans. Happy endings and all that...

Plazaman · 09-02-2012 04:29PM

+1 on Smash's script change and then add some sort of a banjo playing cat in the background to add mystery and suspense (and bring it down to a PG12 rating).

deise go deo · 09-02-2012 04:37PM

One involving lots of hookers and Blackjack.

On seconds thoughts, forget the short film.

_feedback_ · 09-02-2012 04:39PM

Make a film about a little sub forum that was created to offload all the annoying posts of youtube links and pictures. Then it prospers, grows, and eventually is freed from the nasty mods that never wanted its contents in the first place, and becomes a forum all on its own.

Chuck Stone · 09-02-2012 04:40PM

Once upon a time they all lived happily ever after.

Fin.

What kind of script would you write for a 5 min short film?

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