Ode on Footpath-try to guess what it refers to:D

Mario007 · 25-01-2009 08:36PM #1

Look at it, always there when a man needs its cure,
so permanent yet always fluctuating but forever pure.
Be it marble or simple cement we do not care too much,
for in every man's will, there's a descent from glance to touch.
The size of extreme, of maximum and minimum, is what matters,
for a footpath too long or too short no one caters.
So we hail thee, and enjoy the view you kindly grant us,
your footpath on which many like to trespass.

We share squeals of joy if we are to enjoy its view,
contrasting ideas of beauty and greed are all new,
yet it is its power that draws us near and wills us on,
for the footpath many a bard composed a song.
The brilliance of its secrecy tucked away in a cloth
when eyes only wonder upon what the mind sought.
To walk upon it, to feel the civilizations progress
as all rational thought begins to egress
is like a dream of a night forever young come true,
the footpath I glance upon when i walk behind you.

It is taken for granted, one assumes, for its presence,
but what if it were just a prelude of some sixth sense,
for you see I value it for its firmness of art,
and the sounds it makes when hit by bodily part.
It's touch, forever forbidden,yet open to share.
It's clutch, forever forbidden, yet so fair.
Men see that footpath they're blood pressure rises,
almost like an armed attack in times of crises
thus let us renounce the new law prohibiting a crime
that for seeing a footpath without noting will result in a fine.
As John Keats would say, 'beauty is truth, truth beauty that is all you need to know',
as of today i proclaim it my duty, to walk behind you real slow.

busted flush · 26-01-2009 02:48AM

i think it about a goat with a long penis that you have taken pictures of and try to sell on e bay. am i right

Mario007 · 26-01-2009 10:39AM

busted flush wrote: »

i think it about a goat with a long penis that you have taken pictures of and try to sell on e bay. am i right

my god dear sir, you imagination is not only offensive to human minds but also the the animals you follow:D

magicass · 26-01-2009 04:23PM

Sorry op i found your piece very confusing , perhaps you should look at condensing it a fraction . I felt you were picking some words at random just to rhyme and it came across as childish, im not trying to discourage you here by the way. I applaud your courage in trying to write , but i suggest you take your time over your next stint and reread it first . There were some very unnecessary lines in this last piece. Good luck in the future though.

magicass · 26-01-2009 04:24PM

busted flush wrote: »

i think it about a goat with a long penis that you have taken pictures of and try to sell on e bay. am i right

lol at this by the way!

gnolan · 26-01-2009 04:28PM

Also, just a technicality (sp?), "be it marble or simple cement". I think you actually mean concrete, common enough error. Cement is just one of the constituents that makes up a 'concrete' footpath; cement, sand, gravel and water being the basics. A cement footpath wouldn't be much of a footpath; more like a noxious, carcinogenic dirt trail, that wouldn't be worth a bollox in a slight breeze!

shqipshume · 26-01-2009 04:53PM

Mario007 wrote: »

Look at it, always there when a man needs its cure,
so permanent yet always fluctuating but forever pure.
Be it marble or simple cement we do not care too much,
for in every man's will, there's a descent from glance to touch.
The size of extreme, of maximum and minimum, is what matters,
for a footpath too long or too short no one caters.
So we hail thee, and enjoy the view you kindly grant us,
your footpath on which many like to trespass.

We share squeals of joy if we are to enjoy its view,
contrasting ideas of beauty and greed are all new,
yet it is its power that draws us near and wills us on,
for the footpath many a bard composed a song.
The brilliance of its secrecy tucked away in a cloth
when eyes only wonder upon what the mind sought.
To walk upon it, to feel the civilizations progress
as all rational thought begins to egress
is like a dream of a night forever young come true,
the footpath I glance upon when i walk behind you.

It is taken for granted, one assumes, for its presence,
but what if it were just a prelude of some sixth sense,
for you see I value it for its firmness of art,
and the sounds it makes when hit by bodily part.
It's touch, forever forbidden,yet open to share.
It's clutch, forever forbidden, yet so fair.
Men see that footpath they're blood pressure rises,
almost like an armed attack in times of crises
thus let us renounce the new law prohibiting a crime
that for seeing a footpath without noting will result in a fine.
As John Keats would say, 'beauty is truth, truth beauty that is all you need to know',
as of today i proclaim it my duty, to walk behind you real slow.

Another great one

I like your description,yet so obvious and then again not lol

Mario007 · 26-01-2009 05:05PM

shqipshume wrote: »

Another great one
I like your description,yet so obvious and then again not lol

haha thank you:D glad you're enjoying the poems, and continue your support in these dark times of serious contemplations and ideas:D

Mario007 · 26-01-2009 05:06PM

gnolan wrote: »

Also, just a technicality (sp?), "be it marble or simple cement". I think you actually mean concrete, common enough error. Cement is just one of the constituents that makes up a 'concrete' footpath; cement, sand, gravel and water being the basics. A cement footpath wouldn't be much of a footpath; more like a noxious, carcinogenic dirt trail, that wouldn't be worth a bollox in a slight breeze!

ha thanks for that, i actually didn't know that...but concrete wont rhyme:(:D

shqipshume · 26-01-2009 05:17PM

Mario007 wrote: »

haha thank you:D glad you're enjoying the poems, and continue your support in these dark times of serious contemplations and ideas:D

Thank you and Your welcome

continue the good work looking forward to more :P:D

Mario007 · 26-01-2009 07:00PM

shqipshume wrote: »

Thank you and Your welcome continue the good work looking forward to more :P:D

i shall do my best, i have one on stock, but can't be showing all my surprises all at once, especially now with the leaving cert limiting my imagination:D but as i said i'll do my best, and with this kind of support i'll have more motivation

busted flush · 26-01-2009 07:02PM

Mario007 wrote: »

ha thanks for that, i actually didn't know that...but concrete wont rhyme:(:D

i think this was magicasses point!

Mario007 · 27-01-2009 05:43PM

busted flush wrote: »

i think this was magicasses point!

yeah i know, i was just being sarcastic about it:D

busted flush · 27-01-2009 06:00PM

Mario007 wrote: »

yeah i know, i was just being sarcastic about it:D

And yet you feel the need to tell us!

Mario007 · 27-01-2009 06:42PM

busted flush wrote: »

And yet you feel the need to tell us!

the need to tell you i was being sarcastic? why of course, i mean i was tell everyone about my sarcasm, i feel this inner urge, a need, to do so. thats just what i am, a very honest sarcastic person:D

busted flush · 27-01-2009 09:24PM

Mario007 wrote: »

the need to tell you i was being sarcastic? why of course, i mean i was tell everyone about my sarcasm, i feel this inner urge, a need, to do so. thats just what i am, a very honest sarcastic person:D

I'm guessing your about 16/17 due to the immaturity of your posts , so il refrain from telling you how stupid you come across.(:D) by the way in case you don't get it the smiley face is supposed to be sarcastic.

Sarky · 27-01-2009 09:40PM

Keep it civil, kids.

Reilly616 · 28-01-2009 01:58PM

I enjoyed this poem very much I must say. To me this poem signifies that beautiful view which we can all enjoy each day. Strolling back to class mayhaps, after a quick trip to the window... Do, sir, stop me if I ramble.

Mario007 · 28-01-2009 03:08PM

busted flush wrote: »

I'm guessing your about 16/17 due to the immaturity of your posts , so il refrain from telling you how stupid you come across.(:D) by the way in case you don't get it the smiley face is supposed to be sarcastic.

man my post was also being sarcastic, with a smiley at the end:D but do sir, in this discussion about a poem to which, correct me if i'm wrong, you havent contributed one bit, do tell me about the immaturity of my posts. I must say this is what was my aim all the time, for someone to be as nice and tell me:D

btw yeah 17:cool:

(was that mature enough language?:D)

Mario007 · 28-01-2009 03:09PM

Reilly616 wrote: »

I enjoyed this poem very much I must say. To me this poem signifies that beautiful view which we can all enjoy each day. Strolling back to class mayhaps, after a quick trip to the window... Do, sir, stop me if I ramble.

i like your interpretation of the poem, but you know everyone shall take their own outlook on a poem. However yours is very close, and no sir you do not ramble:D

magicass · 28-01-2009 10:17PM

lol, its so obvious that,mario007 and reiley 616 are one and the same !
there names bout have 3 digit numbers at the end, and also similar writing patterns.

magicass · 28-01-2009 10:18PM

Mario007 wrote: »

and no sir you do not ramble:D

AND

magicass · 28-01-2009 10:20PM

Reilly616 wrote: »

Do, sir, stop me if I ramble.

SAY NO MORE

Reilly616 · 28-01-2009 11:03PM

MagicASS, I find it ever so awesome that you are posting on the thread for this particular poem. The irony will not be lost on Mario, I can ASSure.
It is unfortunate that I must inform you that you are incorrect in you ASSumptions. If you would like for Mario and me to prove this you, please, set down the perameters and I'm sure we could oblige

busted flush · 28-01-2009 11:12PM

Reilly616 wrote: »

MagicASS, I find it ever so awesome that you are posting on the thread for this particular poem. The irony will not be lost on Mario, I can ASSure.

lol , from a the man with 3 posts. Well pointed out MA

sukikettle · 28-01-2009 11:18PM

A rainbow

Reilly616 · 28-01-2009 11:20PM

busted flush wrote: »

lol , from a the man with 3 posts. Well pointed out MA

Apologies, but what exactly in that quote has to do with having 3 (now 4) posts?

Mario007 · 28-01-2009 11:24PM

sukikettle wrote: »

A rainbow

wow, i never actually looked at it that way, but it kinda works:D nice imagination i must say and thanks:D

Reilly616 · 28-01-2009 11:29PM

Mario007 wrote: »

wow, i never actually looked at it that way, but it kinda works:D nice imagination i must say and thanks:D

Ah, my good man, there you are. I must concur by the way.

Mario007 · 28-01-2009 11:30PM

magicass wrote: »

SAY NO MORE

wow tell me mr magicass do you never reply to comments using their language? Hmm? you asked me to be more mature and i wrote a comment back with good old english syntax, does that mean we're also the same profile?

btw this situation is really ridiculous sire, do i seem like i care much about your opinions? no! then why the hell would i set up a different profile

oh and wait sukikettle didn't find my poem bad, and he spells rainbow just like i would so he's definatelly the same person as me...

i love you mr ass, i really do, without you who else would i get to annoy with an innocent piece of poetry:D

Reilly616 · 28-01-2009 11:37PM

To be also noted; were I not having fun, and intentionaly being verbose and obtuse in my expressions, you would undoubtedly note the intrinsicly Irish slang that I would use. Mar shampla; "Shur," "like," "feck," "craic," is airile. Or, to be more transparent; actual Irish eg: "mar shampla" and "is airile" etc. I can ASSure you that my Slovakian is not even in the region of my friend's here. And if you search carefully, you may just notice the difference in accent...:eek:

Ode on Footpath-try to guess what it refers to:D

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