opinions on my screaming

Alrite, I realise Im opening myself up to a ****ing wave of abuse that may scar me and force me to never raise a microphone ever again, ever, but nonetheless...

For the past 3-4 months I've begun attempting to do throaty metalcore style vocals, Ive overcome the first few follies, voice going, throat hurting from bad technique etc, now Im just looking for advice,observations etc.

If your gonna judge me by the song (Atreyu) then please,please, just die.

http://www.megaupload.com/?d=CPOCYF6W

By the by, there's a wee conversation between meself and the father figure at the end, and Im simply not ****ed editing it. Thats all folks.