*My funny comedy show* (Please tell me what you think)

Hrm, it has the duck tales music
Ah well, either way.

Firstly it took just under 2 minutes of footage to show the main character - the grossly overweight bad actor chappie in the car - driving to someones house. Fair enough, but the dialogue didn't hold up for me. The main points that you were trying to get across were - this guy is out to scam someone and he is quite intent on doing it. His character comes across quite well but the lack of any script was apparent when he started singing a song "Santa clause is coming to town" where the only words he knew from the song were "Santa Clause is coming to town" and "You better not".

He gets to the house and it takes a little while for the householder to enter the scene so we see some ad-hod mental preparation from him, I didn't feel that he was in any way psyching himself up for it but what really struck me was the woeful adlibbing on the actors part and the editors part when the householder opens the door.

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Actually sorry, I really want to be able to give you a good rundown on this but I can't bring myself to watch it over again. It just doesn't interest me. I can't find any humour in there at all apart from the fact that a large overweight white guy was tricked into believing that he had a large overweight black guy as his brother. It would have been mildly funny if you put in some stupid sound effects like *BOING* when the white guy was told that he was the black guys brother for example. Or even *AROOOOOOOOGA*.

The main problem with your stuff is that you haven't learned to condense the footage that you have made. I think that you think your stuff is funny so you want to show people all of it and don't get the fact that people will not like everything you like, therefore you probably don't put much time into editing the work. Well, you don't actually put much time into editing as time location 2:03 points out. Chop your stuff up into smaller bites. For all I know that large short piece could be funny but it isn't at all funny to me because it is as watered down as a homeopaths final succuss.

The longer your takes last the more obvious the bad acting becomes. And bad acting is not always a problem if you have a good script but you don't even have a script.

Large black guy pretends to be a brother to a large white guy, asks him for food, gets taken to a food place and given food, tries to get in to get a porn movie from a video shop but they are too young. In the car home the large black guy gets annoyed that his 'brother' couldn't get him a porno and the large white guy realises that he may not be his brother.

By the way I almost chuckled when I saw the cut at 4:49 if that makes any consolation.

So to sum up. No that wasn't funny.

Good luck with it though, I really hope you continue in your quest no matter how many people are against you.

Incidentally - which guy are you: Mickey Mouse guy or large overweight guy?

If you are the large guy: you seriously need to start dieting I think I can hear your breathing on the camera shots inside the car at the beginning.
If you are squeaky voice guy: lose the accent or find a more believable voice. I suggest talking as if you have an adenoid problem.

Blitzkrieg, you should reconsider the whole - working for free thing.

Saw the pics and that was already too much.

That is pretty awful to put it mildly. I think the only people that find this funny are yourselves. Like the others said work on your script and editing. If your supposed to be queens get mickey mouse to drop that voice and put on an over the top gay voice. At least it has some comedic value.


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