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A poem that Yester wrote

  • 10-04-2018 11:24AM
    #1
    Yester
    Registered Users, Registered Users 2 Posts: 1,500 ✭✭✭


    This is best read out loud while channeling your inner soccer hooligan.This is a poem called Taking the Torch.

    Don't be a writer, my Father said
    As a prelude to plagurising and butchering a poem he once read.
    Writers are starving, half them are mad
    They have no respect for privacy
    And most of them are bad.
    My Father was a poet
    A poem has long ears and lives in a hole in the ground
    I heard him say
    Just before they took him away
    My Father was a poet
    But that poet died when he was still young
    And it's corpse rotted and festered inside him
    So **** off old men
    You and your whimsy are better off dead
    I'm born of a new age
    I'll take the eye out of your head.


Comments

  • #2
    Yellow pack crisps
    Registered Users, Registered Users 2 Posts: 564 ✭✭✭Yellow pack crisps


    Yester wrote: »
    This is best read out loud while channeling your inner soccer hooligan.This is a poem called Taking the Torch.

    Don't be a writer, my Father said
    As a prelude to plagurising and butchering a poem he once read.
    Writers are starving, half them are mad
    They have no respect for privacy
    And most of them are bad.
    My Father was a poet
    A poem has long ears and lives in a hole in the ground
    I heard him say
    Just before they took him away
    My Father was a poet
    But that poet died when he was still young
    And it's corpse rotted and festered inside him
    So **** off old men
    You and your whimsy are better off dead
    I'm born of a new age
    I'll take the eye out of your head.


    I really like this poem. I think you should expand it, the idea is good. I wonder would 'My father as a poet' work better than 'My father was a poet'? Just a observation.


  • #3
    Yester
    Registered Users, Registered Users 2 Posts: 1,500 ✭✭✭Yester


    Yellow pack crisps wrote: »
    I really like this poem. I think you should expand it, the idea is good. I wonder would 'My father as a poet' work better than 'My father was a poet'? Just a observation.

    Yes. I like your observation. I think using "My father as a poet" the first time and then "My father was a poet" is interesting to think about. Thanks for your input.

    Don't be a writer, my Father said
    As a prelude to plagurising and butchering a poem he once read.
    Writers are starving, half them are mad
    They have no respect for privacy
    And most of them are bad.
    My Father as a poet
    A poem has long ears and a floppy tail and lives in a hole in the ground
    I heard him say
    Just before they took him away
    My Father was a poet
    But that poet died when he was still young
    And it's corpse rotted and festered inside him
    So **** off old men
    You and your whimsy are better off dead
    I'm born of a new age
    I'll take the eye out of your head.


  • #4
    Sheridan81
    Closed Accounts Posts: 1,429 ✭✭✭Sheridan81


    I would leave out the 'My father as a poet' line altogether.


  • #5
    [Deleted User]
    Posts: 394 ✭✭ [Deleted User]


    I would not change my father was a poet as it straight away piques your interest - has he died/is he no longer a poet/etc. This is answered somewhat later in the poem but it initiated an interesting train of though for me as a reader.


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