VOTE HERE: Variations on a Theme #13: Yuletide Yarns

Mr E

#7 - Walking in the Air

Das Kitty wrote: »

Mr. E -- Maybe I picked up the ending of your story wrong. I thought the fact he could speak at the end meant that he put the kibosh on the brother spilling the beans. I thought he'd killed him tbh. Looking at some of the other feedback I think I was misreading.

The food at the party contained a cure, and everyone who ate food would have got their voice back that night. Not expositiony enough, it seems.

#5 - I Saw Mommy Kissing Santa Claus

Food???
I was thinking along DK's lines too ;s

echo beach

#8 - The First Noël

Mr E wrote: »

Mine was Silent Night, and I'm humbled by the feedback. There was more story there that I had to cut out - it was very hard to keep under the word limit. I'm very seriously thinking of fleshing it out into something bigger - there is scope there for an interesting world and a meatier story.

Who knows? It could be my first book.

I think there is the making of a book in that plot. A world where most people can't speak (there would have to be some exceptions because there are always some people resistant to any virus) would be very interesting. Where would the deaf community fit in? They might be an elite due to their head start with sign language.

Mr E wrote: »

The food at the party contained a cure, and everyone who ate food would have got their voice back that night. Not expositiony enough, it seems.

I figured that out. Maybe you need a certain devious kind of mind to see what was going on.:)

Congratulations to Das Kitty on a wonderful seasonal story that had everything. While it wouldn't make a full novel it could probably be expanded a bit.

I wrote no 2 and a big thanks to everybody who bothered to read it and to those who voted for it. Two more votes than I usually get in a VOAT.:)

Thanks to Pooka for doing the organising.

HalloweenJack

#5 - I Saw Mommy Kissing Santa Claus

Congrats Das Kitty, it was a very moving story.