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[love letters] - Flames

oddlyaromatic · 2003-10-05 17:34:12

I still have it, you know. Remember how intense your words were? Little barbs and daggers and hooks - I didn't even notice when you slid them in. But I knew when you ripped them out, Every little metallic point tearing flesh from bones and bones from flesh and I forgave you. But I still have it, you know. Maybe I'll burn…

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05-10-2003 6:34pm

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oddlyaromatic

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I still have it, you know.
Remember how intense your words were?
Little barbs and daggers and hooks -
I didn't even notice when you slid them in.

But I knew when you ripped them out,
Every little metallic point
tearing flesh from bones and bones from flesh and
I forgave you.

But I still have it, you know.
Maybe I'll burn it -
And your "eternal" love
will turn to flame and ash.

Just like the real thing really,
While the flame burned nothing mattered
And now all I have are ashes
charred and useless.

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#2 05-10-2003 7:11pm
Roller Toaster

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Nice work oddlyaromatic. I like how you link the hurtful words to the barbs, daggers and hooks, very effective image.

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#3 06-10-2003 2:17pm
oddlyaromatic

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Thanks. It's an obvious analogy, but it just appealed to me when I sat down to write.

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