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Thanx 4 The Fish · 2003-09-15 15:52:20

First go at this, well second really, one here but this one is just something I thought about. Where does it all start ? Where does it all end ? When speaking from the heart To who was your lifelong friend When was it the decision To hurt was ever made ? To make a small incision Into which salt would be laid. How can we…

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Thanx 4 The Fish

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First go at this, well second really, one here but this one is just something I thought about.

Where does it all start ?
Where does it all end ?
When speaking from the heart
To who was your lifelong friend

When was it the decision
To hurt was ever made ?
To make a small incision
Into which salt would be laid.

How can we ever learn
To love and trust again ?
When both are now so hard to earn
By us, Mere mortal men.

Trees don't have this trouble
They can live and grow then die.
If we lived in our own bubble
Would we ever have to try ?

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#2 15-09-2003 11:54pm
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Excellent work there.
I could identify with what you were saying so well.
Good use of imagery and emotions in harmony with one another.
Good job

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#3 21-09-2003 12:06am
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If that poem is about p[eople who you trust screwing you over then all i can say is, I hear you.

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