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  • 21-03-2015 03:20PM
    #1
    chrisob91
    Registered Users, Registered Users 2 Posts: 2 ✭


    Her hair as golden as rays of sunshine

    Her eyes as green as swaying blades of long grass in the summertime

    Her smile as precious as our brief time on this Earth

    Her laugh as enchanting as a shooting star whizzing by on a clear night

    Her spirit as pure and as delicate as falling snow


    -Christopher O Brien


Comments

  • #2
    echo beach
    Registered Users, Registered Users 2 Posts: 1,252 ✭✭✭echo beach


    I love the last three lines but I'm not so sure about the first two.


  • #3
    dandyelevan
    Closed Accounts Posts: 257 ✭✭dandyelevan


    Mary

    She had hair like a Golden Labrador

    Her eyes wandered, each one independent of the other

    Her smile was as toothless as a Gummy Bear

    Her laugh would put a Banshee to shame...any night

    Her spirit...well, she liked the wee drop

    Ahh, my Mary.
    She was only a Poitín makers daughter, but I loved her Still


  • #4
    femur61
    Registered Users, Registered Users 2 Posts: 1,588 ✭✭✭femur61


    chrisob91 wrote: »
    Her hair as golden as rays of sunshine

    Her eyes as green as swaying blades of long grass in the summertime

    Her smile as precious as our brief time on this Earth

    Her laugh as enchanting as a shooting star whizzing by on a clear night

    Her spirit as pure and as delicate as falling snow


    -Christopher O Brien

    I liked the poem. The first line is maybe a bit cliched and it gets better as the poem goes on. Like the other poster the last three lines are really good. .


  • #5
    morriss003
    Registered Users, Registered Users 2 Posts: 18 ✭morriss003


    chrisob91 wrote: »
    Her hair as golden as rays of sunshine

    Her eyes as green as swaying blades of long grass in the summertime

    Her smile as precious as our brief time on this Earth

    Her laugh as enchanting as a shooting star whizzing by on a clear night

    Her spirit as pure and as delicate as falling snow


    -Christopher O Brien

    Nice


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