You're gone

lilmissprincess

The hug that used to be mine
No Longer
The jokes I used to laugh at
No Longer
The smiles you used to give me
No Longer.
You're gone.

The songs that we sang to
No Longer
The days of rain we had
No Longer
The looks of playful childishness.
No Longer
You're gone.

The emails in my inbox
No Longer
The calls on the phone
No Longer
The prescence in my life
No Longer
You're gone.
I'm sorry.

Anto and Moe

Me likes! I like the effect that repetition like that has.

ctrl-alt-delete

dont think i like it, i know poetry can be basic but for me this is a little too basic, there aint anything special about it?

Tusky

boo bloody hoo.

Nirina

Hmm, not as good as "Happiness". I ain't feeling this, i amn't a fan of the repeating thing. (I might've used it myself tho, so don't mock me!) But its still not all that terrible. I sense a small..story? Anyway, you've got more in you, i know!!

DoctorEdgeWild

I quite like that. I love poems with repetition and its simplicity is I think what really appeals to me. For some reason, the email mention seems really out of place, at least to me. Maybe I'm just really old fashioned!

Dragan

For me the apology at the end made it.

Lots of things in works in this them put it on the other person.

Well done.

lilmissprincess

Thanks for the comments..the repetition bugged me a little at first, but i thought it worked out ok..