Friendship-yeah Right

lilmissprincess

Whats another soul to you
Something to befriend a while
And then kick down in the earth?
Soemone to listen to all your stories
Idolise you maybe for a while
Make you feel big?
A person to laugh at your less funny jokes,
And help you with your "problems"?
Well not me.
You kicked me down and now I'm out,
You spread the arsenic on the food, I lost out
I don't need you, want you in my life
You the poison spreader...
Go taste the remains on the knife.

Yeah-teenage angstish- but hey its how i feel.

Le Rack

good imagery and graphicy, goody.

Phat Chance

Very good, nice and snappy.

Waltons

I didn't really like this. For me it kinda harks back to the "diary entry" type poems.
While I complimented Le Rack on the simplicity of one of her recent pieces I don't think simplicity really works in this case. It's a little too much towards the point in some parts which makes the imagery and metaphors stand out as odd (or vice versa)

lilmissprincess

thanx for the comments, ok, the metaphors.
Poison-rumours.
For some reason when my firend saw the word knife she thought it was about a murder, but things are spread with knives so..

NoDayBut2Day

I liked it. The only suggestion I can give is that it didn't seem to flow very well. But thanks for sharing!