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  • 10-09-2005 5:13pm
    #1
    shiv
    Closed Accounts Posts: 408 ✭✭


    I don’t ask you to go
    Sleep in the spare room
    When I should

    Instead I move
    My pride aside and
    Lift the duvet

    After another
    Excruciating evening
    Spent excavating

    You offer me
    A chocolate éclair

    A blank envelope
    To stuff my feelings into

    So I wander outside
    Pacing my frustration

    With each scrawl
    My heart howls
    Into the late-night
    Summer air

    Quietly plotting
    My escape
    Over the balcony

    Watching the unmoving
    Boats light up
    The water

    Sentences slip out
    And I start
    To shut down
    My hopes

    But then you come out to find me
    And I don’t hear the traffic
    Or my catastrophic thoughts
    Sizzling along my synapses
    Anymore


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    #2
    el_tiddlero
    Registered Users Posts: 400 ✭✭el_tiddlero


    this is cool, i like the feeling it describes.. this line is my favourite...
    "A blank envelope
    To stuff my feelings into"
    what a cracker of an image..
    thumbs up!!


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    #3
    shiv
    Closed Accounts Posts: 408 ✭✭shiv


    Thanks el tiddlero, appreciate the feedback!


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    #4
    ziggy sawdust
    Closed Accounts Posts: 30 ✭ziggy sawdust


    very nicely written - all the right bits in the right places - love the way the reference to the boats slips in - don't know why - just seems to fit - keep up the good work!!

    zs


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