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Drops Of You

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  • 01-08-2005 7:45pm
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    Le Rack
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    When I want to cry
    It seems to rain.
    So when I want to smile,
    Should it not shine.

    The moon becomes pale
    When I gaze upon your fair skin.
    And the sky turns to blood
    When my thoughts reach you again.

    A heartbeat becomes an eternity
    With the mention of your name,
    And like a child
    I lose myself within your eyes again.

    I could stay there forever.
    Awash in warm hazel,
    But whenever I do
    It rains.


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    #2
    Nidge
    Closed Accounts Posts: 560 ✭✭✭Nidge


    Le Rack wrote:
    When I want to cry
    It seems to rain.
    So when I want to smile,
    Should it not shine.

    No it shouldn't "shine", it always rains in Ireland, the weather does not change according to your mood.

    That was cheap, but anyway I'll look at your poem more in depth later, I'm tired right now.


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    Le Rack
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    your really nasty when your tired


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    Nidge
    Closed Accounts Posts: 560 ✭✭✭Nidge


    Ah that's not really nasty. I was just thinking out loud, doesn't mean anything really.


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    Le Rack
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    so then your just plane nasty? :)


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    Nidge
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    Le Rack wrote:
    so then you're just plain nasty? :)

    Corrections in bold, and evidently yes. :)


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    Le Rack
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    g'way! I realised that after it posted and I was too darn lazy to go fix it, I even had it the other way and said "no, thats wrong, the other way" *Slap for own good


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    Nidge
    Closed Accounts Posts: 560 ✭✭✭Nidge


    Le Rack wrote:
    g'way! I realised that after I posted and I was too darn lazy to go fix it, I even had it the other way and said "no, that' s wrong, the other way" *Slap for own good*

    Corrections in bold, I could do this all night! :D


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    Le Rack
    Closed Accounts Posts: 9,846 ✭✭✭Le Rack


    Ha Ha! The "I" was an accident, as for the second astrix (me checks dictionary) That was not even required! So merher!


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    Nidge
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    No it's internet speak, people use one asterisk if they are correcting something, if they are pretending they are doing an action they put an asterisk either side of the action. So merher to you too.


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    Le Rack
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    Have you ever visited the Cuckoo's Nest darling? That's the way we do things there.


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    Nidge
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    Le Rack wrote:
    Have you ever visited the Cuckoo's Nest darling? That's the way we do things there.

    sorry haven't checked it yet but then it's what everyone else I know on the internet does, so maybe i'll just be blissfully ignorant, it works for some people. :p


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    airetam_storm
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    Stop bitching, both a ya :mad:
    Le Rack wrote:
    A heartbeat becomes an eternity
    With the mention of your name,
    And like a child
    I lose myself within your eyes again.
    Back on topic, thought this bit was real good. Second verse was the weakest part for me...


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    #14
    Le Rack
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    We're not bitching, its playful banter, note the smilies! :)


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    Sarky
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    PMs, people.


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    lilmissprincess
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    Hey rach good poem....


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