Inevitable.....

ANarcho-Munk

Another one bites the dust,
this world, it's come to an end,
will we care? probably not,
Like a moth innocently moving towards that globule of golden light.
It's entranced in it's own ignorance
and ping!, it's all over, just like that

Choked by our own ignorance,
Slowly we tie the noose of our own demise,
The hangman fluidly raises his hood,
and in it's face stands a mirror.....with our reflections.




Much to the coincidence of this thread my poetry is inevitably ****e, especially since school is over for the summer and I have absolutley no focus in writing now what-so-ever :rolleyes: meh and least I'm trying.

Feedback, as always is very welcomed.

the raven

ANarcho-Munk wrote:

Much to the coincidence of this thread my poetry is inevitably ****e,

you could try learning how to write sentences that make sense. yes one can deduce what you mean to say but bad english just ain't a turn on...

ANarcho-Munk

the raven wrote:

you could try learning how to write sentences that make sense. yes one can deduce what you mean to say but bad english just ain't a turn on...

No need to make such snide comments, loosen up a little.

ANarcho-Munk

Anyway, rebel

Just tell me where I went wrong and *actually* criticize the poem.
As in telling me where I went wrong etc etc.

the raven

ANarcho-Munk wrote:

Anyway rebel

Just tell me where I went wrong and *actually* criticize the poem.
As in telling me where I went wrong etc etc.

cool, now i'm a rebel... anyway, you didn't go wrong - as i've said before, wrong and right are inapplicable.

ok, gimme time and i'll get off the horse and actually criticise..

ANarcho-Munk

the raven wrote:

cool, now i'm a rebel...

I just mistook you for some one else there for a sec:rolleyes:
Silly me.

the raven

ANarcho-Munk wrote:

I just mistook you for some one else there for a sec:rolleyes:
Silly me.

damnit!!!









i wanna be a rebel...

ANarcho-Munk

heheheh you're not a rebel.




and the very fact that you do want to become a rebel, now means that I will call you anything but a rebel :P

the raven

ANarcho-Munk wrote:

heheheh you're not a rebel.




and the very fact that you do want to become a rebel, now means that I will call you anything but a rebel :P

oh i knew that well enough...