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Impossible Love

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  • 30-07-2005 10:46pm
    #1
    Le Rack
    Closed Accounts Posts: 9,846 ✭✭✭


    A love as wide and deep as the sea,
    Is not possible.
    No matter what you say.

    No matter what you do.
    No matter what game you play.
    No love can survive the strains of lengths.
    Despite your two to one claim.

    What can you feel for a flashing little box,
    Where are the hugs,
    What about the kisses;
    Sweet and tender on your perfect skin.

    You can't.
    It won't.


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    #2
    airetam_storm
    Closed Accounts Posts: 2,301 ✭✭✭airetam_storm


    Definatly your weirdest so far..... ;) But the first two verses are really heartfelt :)


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    #3
    Le Rack
    Closed Accounts Posts: 9,846 ✭✭✭Le Rack


    I'm wierd! :) Basically its me telling someone that at the age of like 16 an over-seas relationship won't work, despite the "games" the play with their computers...


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    airetam_storm
    Closed Accounts Posts: 2,301 ✭✭✭airetam_storm


    Ha i thought it was a love for the computer :D I really do know some people who would miss their computer as much as they would miss a partner :p

    You know who you are, Mr Galway ;)


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    #5
    Le Rack
    Closed Accounts Posts: 9,846 ✭✭✭Le Rack


    Sarky?


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    airetam_storm
    Closed Accounts Posts: 2,301 ✭✭✭airetam_storm


    Na he loves his beard too much to love anything else :p


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    Nidge
    Closed Accounts Posts: 560 ✭✭✭Nidge


    Le Rack wrote:
    A love as wide and deep as the sea,
    Is not possible.
    No matter what you say.

    No matter what you do.
    No matter what game you play.
    No love can survive the strains of lengths.
    Despite your two to one claim.

    What can you feel for a flashing little box,
    Where are the hugs,
    What about the kisses;
    Sweet and tender on your perfect skin.

    You can't.
    It won't.

    That is the most direct poem I have ever seen. If this poem was a woman, she would have no clothes on, it leaves so little to the imagination. That really just isn't a poem it's a 13 sentence short story, a thought written down.


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    the raven
    Registered Users Posts: 329 ✭✭the raven


    yeah, it's a pretty poor effort... i don't think the majority of your recent stuff is worth posting; unless your intention through feedback is to whittle out the bad...


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    ANarcho-Munk
    Closed Accounts Posts: 2,397 ✭✭✭ANarcho-Munk


    You should probably give your poems a little bit more time instead of rushing them, and only post them after you make sure you are completly happy with it.


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    #10
    Le Rack
    Closed Accounts Posts: 9,846 ✭✭✭Le Rack


    Nidge wrote:
    That is the most direct poem I have ever seen. If this poem was a woman, she would have no clothes on, it leaves so little to the imagination. That really just isn't a poem it's a 13 sentence short story, a thought written down.
    Its a firm belief/thought.
    Its been wandering around my mind for a while, the whole story is plane rediculous, and I just keep telling people this cuz it makes me fairly angry, mneh...


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