Whats Wrong, Sugar. could i please have some feedback on this

OutlawBlues

I got on my horse and went riding into town
I looked up around, and as I looked down
I saw people and women and animals and all
Then I saw a man that I knew was going to fall

I said, Hey Outlaw praytell,
What are you doing standing at the wishing well?
He said, I just stole a coin from my honey
But i didn't know what to do with it
So I threw it in and wished for paper money

I said, Okay buddy, I'll see you later
And rode on down to the financial centre
I went and got some food for my steed
Then started speaking to a journalist who couldn't read

I said, Buddy why don't you learn it?
He said, Don't you think I yearn it?
I'm blind, the journalist said
I said, Alright, Let me tell you about this book I read.

We went on like that for a while
I said I gotta go, I see my friend, he's a pedophile

I said to him, Hey buddy any news for me?
He said, Well.... Let me see
I'm going to the cliff to end my life
I said why
He said I just fought with my six year old wife

Man that ain't anything dire, I said
It is he told me, when she wants you dead
I said, Don't worry man, I can sort that out
He said, Forget it! I already spoke with your friend the kraut
He siad, I got leprosy, I got rabbis, I'm foaming at the mouth
Listen Friend, I just want out!

So I walked him up and gave him a noose
He started singing the 6 year old wife blues
I said, Shut up and put this around your neck
He said, Man make sure my wifes not a wreck!
Take her into your home, into your bed
That ain't a problem, Trust me! I said

I rode down from the cliff and saw a man with a harpoon
I thought, He looks like something out a cartoon!
I said, Hey, what are you doing Daffy Duck
He said, Man I'm in for a stroke of bad luck
He said, I'm in for pain and probably worse
I said why
He said, I was caught wearing a skirt

I said, Oh man
He looked at me and away I ran

I rode to the city, into the town
And said to a girl, Whats got you down?
She said, I found out my husband just died
I said, Don't worry baby, thats alright!
I said, Hey girl, have you ever been sold
She said, Of course man, I'm 6 years old!

I said, You won't believe what your husband said
She said what
I said, Were to wed!
She screamed, I'm so excited, is it true?
I said woah!
She said, I love older people, just like you!

I lifted her onto the back of my horse
And rode all the way down to the church
Father said, By the power invested in me
I said, Hey man, do you want me to get down on one knee
I said, Girl, I don't want him to go through with this
So we rode away, and I gave her a kiss

I took the girl all the way back home
And we were sitting in the living room all alone
When suddenly my real wife came back
But that didn't matter because she was black
I said, Darling, go cook me a stew
She said, What do you take me for, a fool?
She said, Man get off your high horse
I dismounted and said yeah honey, I will of course
But what the hell is wrong
She said, You've been this man all along

I said, Girl you're going the right way for a thumping
She said, Man, I thought you was a woman!
I said, Man I hope other people don't think like that
And the six year old said, You horrible stinking manly rat
I said
Oh
No
And left the house with two women in two
The black one said, Come here so I can stab you with this knife
I said don't worry sugar, I can end my own life

I went up to the cliff, all ready to jump off
When suddenly I thought I heard the voice of God
I blocked my ears and jumped off as quick as lightening
And man, the drop was pretty damn frightening
I thought, Man what a trip, but it's not so bad
And least my two women won't be sad.

supersheep

Crazy, weird and freaky - but I like it. Is it a song? It seems like it would suit being sung very well...

OutlawBlues

yeah its a song.
to the tune of any of these
bob dylan - isis, joey, i shall be free, i shall be free no.10, motorpyscho nite

supersheep

If I knew the songs, I'd get it better... Must look them up and see what it'd sound like...