The Rebound

Le Rack

If I have to ask,
Whats the point in being here?
If you have to fake it,
I don't want you near.

Why bother staying in arms of cold?
You used me to feel.
Feel theres something there.
I knew but never cared.

I didn't want you to go,
But didn't we both know,
It wasn't me you saw
When you'd stare right through me.

It wasn't me you'd hug.
It wasn't me you'd kiss.
Allowing me to believe,
Then something was amiss.

It was me.
I was missing.
You never let me be there.
You never gave me a chance.

Cold and stained by you.
Without reason. Without cause.
I loved you, without you,
My life seems at a loss.

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Totally adored, loved a guy, finally got with him. I knew it was too soon after his break up, I knew I was the rebound but I didn't let it matter because I liked him so much I just wanted to be with him.

lilmissprincess

hey le rack, have a feelin i know what this is about, and who, nice poem, you're a pretty good writer, keep it up.
Stay happy babe.

lilmissprincess

:rolleyes: hey le rack, have a feelin i know what this is about, and who, nice poem, you're a pretty good writer, keep it up.
Stay happy babe.

Le Rack

three cheers for stating the obvious!
happiness is merely a frame of mind that causes your jaw to hurt from smiling. ANd who wants that?
what IS your obbsession with glitter?

lilmissprincess

Le Rack wrote:

three cheers for stating the obvious!
happiness is merely a frame of mind that causes your jaw to hurt from smiling. ANd who wants that?
what IS your obbsession with glitter?

Sorry, that wasnt supposed to post twice...and yeah, i get the whole sore jaw thing too. I have people telling me 24/7 to smile..do they not realise that emotionless expression is less effort?
Whats wrong with glitter?? Its sparkly and prettiful...

Gross Halfwit

It was me.
I was missing.
You never let me be there.
You never gave me a chance.

I like that bit.

Le Rack

thanx I think.... that bit actually has a rake of different meanings when you know the full circumstance but mneh...

Le Rack

lisa, darling, it actually uses less muscles to smile than it does to frown, so your just using precious energy when you frown!

Mr.Nice Guy

This poem is muddled. You start off analysing some guy and then it's "It was me./I was missing".

How can it be you and him?

Chop the last two verses and it's OK.

Le Rack

the fact that I was missing is the whole point of it, when he dumped me he said something was missing from the relationship, the fact that we were together a mere 18 days and for 5 of those I was out of hte country kinda adds to this, and produces this, look at it from that angle and it makes more sense, your simply reading it one piece to another whereas it all forms one.

ANarcho-Munk

That was a pretty good poem. Keep it up


(I'm new to this forum so I'll post some poems and stuff tomorrow when I'm ready =P )

Le Rack

eh, thanx, I've done better...

lilmissprincess

Le Rack wrote:

lisa, darling, it actually uses less muscles to smile than it does to frown, so your just using precious energy when you frown!

yeah rach i know, but i'm not frowning my face is just emotionless. not smiling butt not frrowning.

~Rebel~

lilmissprincess wrote:

not smiling butt not frrowning.

Not Waving, But Drowning.

lilmissprincess

~Rebel~ wrote:

Not Waving, But Drowning.

Love that poem...kinda creepy though...

Le Rack

tell me tell me I like the sound of it

lilmissprincess

its in most english books, well in most junior cert english books we use in school, I think its an anon poem. If I find it I'll send it ta ya.

mcguiver

Ouch...
It's not often I read something that opens old memories.

Good piece of work.

Le Rack

sorry bout that, its not great though, thanx enyhu

atomised

'Not waving but drowning' is a poem by Stevie Smith -- one of the best titles ever...

Le Rack

okay...