Few songs *a tad bit of adult content*

Seed

Righty, heya, hello etc.

Have done a few song type things and was wondering if you lot could comment on them. I'm more used to writing fictional stories and such so..ah well. I wrote like 19 this month but I just want y'all to comment on these 3 at least.

Mass of the Masses

These evil deeds confuse the weak
And blind the hearts of the pure
Eating up the vile and lies being served
To you under threat of torture
Humanity is not a sin
Believe in yourself before
You believe in them

Live be strong kneel to none

So come break down the walls
Built by the hypocrites
Be released from the cage of ignorance

‘I love you’ – ‘I hate you’
I don’t even ****ing know you
Born unto tears raised unto fear
It’s a wonder any of us are still here
Humanity is not a sin
Believe in yourself before
Entrust your life unto them

Live be strong kneel to none

So come break down the walls
Built by the hypocrites
Be released from the cage of ignorance

Don’t! Don’t! Don’t! Don’t!

Don’t turn your back on me
I care for you all this you’ll see
You’re free to believe in what you will
Just make sure that will is me
Don’t turn your back on me
Lest a plague be unleashed you’ll see
That the father who loves you all
Not hesitate eternal punishment befall

So come break down the walls
Built by the hypocrites
Be released from the cage of ignorance
So come break down the walls
Built by the hypocrites
Be released from the cage of ignorance

Don’t! Don’t! Don’t! Don’t!
Don’t! Don’t! Don’t! Don’t!
Don’t! Don’t! Don’t! Don’t!

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For Now And Ever More

Who are you?
Who are you?

Fist to jaw head to wall
Oh my word how I am flawed
Shun the façade now you emerge
Stand tall or crawl endure it all

Drink your life away

For now it comes and here you’ll stay
Forever more in this bed you made
Believe I’ll cure the wounds I’ve caused
Believe I’ll try for now and ever more

Eyes of the innocent staring into
Drown by the tears I wept for you
Stained by the shame I bled for you
Never to displease you have I intended

Shout your life away

For now it comes and here you’ll stay
Forever more in this bed you made
Believe I’ll cure the wounds I’ve caused
Believe I’ll try for now and ever more

One day I will be free from your presence
One day I will be free from this torment
One day I will hold my head up with pride
One day I will not hold my head and cry
At the thought of what you’ve done to me
And the way you’ve burned your hate unto me
For the way you destroyed my affection
For the world for now and ever more

For now it comes and here you’ll stay
Forever more in this bed of nails
Believe I’ll cure the wounds I’ve caused
Believe I’ll try for now and ever more
Believe I’ll cry for now and ever more
Believe I’ll cry for now and ever more

Who are you?
Who are you?

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Devil May Cry

For the years I’ve been hurt I retain the scars
Drawing near the day I come out of my glass jar
As I smoke, drink and swear I start to feel nothing but
My odium is everything that you fear
Squeezing me your bitterness
Whiskey cures all that ails ones self
Yet with me it leaves a taste of self-loathing on my face

Where are you going? You’ve awoken me
Now you will stand there and you will see
For all of the times you hurt me inside
Now you’ll bear witness as the devil cries

Blood and tears pouring right down in a steady flow
Consequences of the doormat that I have become
Misinterpret my lack of action as a lack of strength
No longer will I put my pride on the line for you
Daily habits ringing my neck so hard
Exploded on me covered in self pity shards
See my wings spread open wide
Bearing down on this world tonight

Where are you going? You’ve awoken me
Now you will stand there and you will see
For all of the times you hurt me inside
Now you’ll bear witness as the devil cries

Squeezing me tighter you tried to do
Now this has backfired on you
Never forget why I instigate
The end of the world as I deliberate
All of the times I took your ****
All of the times I let you in
All of the times I believed in you
One thing left now I ****ing hate you

Where are you going? You’ve awoken me
Where are you going? You’ve awoken me
Where are you going? You’ve awoken me
Where are you going?
Now you will stand there and you will see
For all of the times you hurt me
For all of the times you ripped apart my pride
Now you’ll bear witness as I unleash the night
Now you will stand there and you will see
For all of the times you hurt me inside
Now you’ll bear witness as the devil cries
As the devil cries

Gone West

very good! put an ad in the b&s or here, even asking for someone to put some music to these rhymes(mabye old tunes) and you could release a novelty cd or something. quite good