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D!ve^Bomb! · 03-02-2005 12:42am #1

Hello people..

Here's a short track i got done today, have a listen and let me know what you think.. i still haven't recieved my mic so this is all done using amplitube and i borrowed a ****ty bass off a friend!

it's pretty short as well, only 2mins 19sec.. but i want to extend it when there are lyrics put to it..

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/bonzaibobmusic.htm

It's the 'rough demo'

feylya · 03-02-2005 12:45am

Dude, should probably be in the Bands/Musicians forum. Not strictly an instruments issue. </Moderator>

D!ve^Bomb! · 03-02-2005 12:48am

Ok, erm, how about this...

i used a strat, does it sound out of tune? i dunno.. erm...

is that better?:D

feylya · 03-02-2005 12:49am

Hmmm....

Just listening to it. The riff at the 30 secondish mark is very RATMy. Bass needs something extra. Not sure. And the drums are annoying me.

Ooooh, solo.

D!ve^Bomb! · 03-02-2005 12:54am

Yeah very rage,,, Drop D sucker so i am! yeah the bass does need somethin extra, but it's hard to tell with my headphones as they have a lot of low end in them! and i got lazy with the drums.. repeating the same fills and all..

feylya · 03-02-2005 12:56am

Yeah, I can understand that. There was something about that guitar tone that really annoyed me. I don't know what it was. IMO, it needed more gain

And I just found an Ibanez RG1570 Prestige with case, shipped for €650ish.... Yum

D!ve^Bomb! · 03-02-2005 1:01am

.. i'd like to re-record it when i get the sm58 and use my amp and see how it turns out then.. will have another look at the session file tomoro and see what i can do about the main guitar.. i've been told it's kinda 'boring':( but that'll all change when there's some decent vocals on it and i play around with the structure

feylya · 03-02-2005 1:10am

There's definately some things in there that I'd change. Even if you mimicked the vocal line on the guitar, it'd fill the song out a bit more.

D!ve^Bomb! · 03-02-2005 1:16am

yeah that's the reason i put the solo in there, to kind of fill the gap.. but i'd rather stay away from the whole 'vocal line on guitar' kind of thing.. at the moment i'm looking for a singer, actually i'm meetin one tomoro and if they listen to it with all this lead guitar over it they may be put off and just think i'm a vai fret wanker.. i'd like to leave it open to interpretention and build it around vocals even tho there aren't any there yet..

so in this paricular track it's obvious there will be vocals over the main bass line, then i'll bridge onto the main riff etc.. this track is just a basic idea of what the finished product will be.

feylya · 03-02-2005 1:18am

Well, I just meant have the guitar line in there to give people an idea but not leave it in there in the final song. Look forward to hearing it when it's done.

D!ve^Bomb! · 03-02-2005 1:22am

hee hee, 'when it's done'.. lets hope it does get done!!! i'm not getting any more patient and the stage awaits!

hopefully all will go well with this singer tomoro

feylya · 03-02-2005 1:24am

Yeah, I know what it's like. I've never finished recording any of my songs. I get a riff, play around with it for a while, can't go anywhere with it and abandon it

Giblet · 03-02-2005 1:28am

The solo sounds out of key. Dunno if that was because it's a deliberate fill in.

D!ve^Bomb! · 03-02-2005 1:42am

Giblet wrote:

The solo sounds out of key. Dunno if that was because it's a deliberate fill in.

yeah there are a few notes out of key alright,, i dont care tho, it was the first thing that came out and i was just too tired at the time to do it over and over again... there was more but i just cut it out..

sound_wave · 03-02-2005 2:22am

looking forward to hearing the finished version. The guitar tone does get a little grating by the end of the song, just a pointer.

D!ve^Bomb! · 03-02-2005 10:43am

cool man..

Shank · 03-02-2005 7:33pm

Sounds great, solo seems too busy for the rhythm though, less notes would fit better I think good work

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