Three Words

ven0m

Three little words,
That I know will hurt you,
Three syllabels that hurt me too,
For a poet who can write,
Words that would echo,
throughout any single night,
A man enveloped by his own eloquence,
I can't bring myself to say,
The one most important single sentence,
The one that's spoken from the heart,
The one that I fear to utter,
The one that remains forever true,
Three most beautiful words every spoken,
These words,
Just for you,
My darling J.,
I love you.


::: ven0mous :::

D!ve^Bomb!

How did you get from

ven0m wrote:

Three little words,
That I know will hurt you,
Three syllabels that hurt me too,

to

ven0m wrote:

Three most beautiful words every spoken,
These words,
Just for you,
My darling J.,
I love you.


::: ven0mous :::

granted, i don't really know what i'm talking about, but it struck me as strange:)

edibility

ven0m wrote:

A man enveloped by his own eloquence,

Lol, tbh. You can write ven0m, but thats a bit.....ott.

ven0m

D!ve^Bomb! wrote:

How did you get from





to



granted, i don't really know what i'm talking about, but it struck me as strange:)

simple - telling someone how you feel when you know they are scared ****less of anyone feeling that way about them in case they get hurt again....

edibility wrote:

Lol, tbh. You can write ven0m, but thats a bit.....ott.

not meant literally - it's an obscure reference to something said to me.


::: ven0mous :::

IANOC

could have been worded better BUT Nice all the same.nice job

BEAT

ven0m wrote:

simple - telling someone how you feel when you know they are scared ****less of anyone feeling that way about them in case they get hurt again....
::: ven0mous :::

Ya know, I know exactley what you mean there

MojoMaker

ven0m wrote:

simple - telling someone how you feel when you know they are scared ****less of anyone feeling that way about them in case they get hurt again....

That didn't quite make sense to me on first reading. Surely the person to whom you are afraid to say the 3 little words is not scared about someone loving them but scared among loving someone themselves. Isn't that where the [traditional] hurt comes from?

The former strikes me as fear of responsibility rather than fear of intimacy. Although as I reflect on it is now it is indeed a genuine fear in it's own right. If that was your goal you've captured it nicely. You should never be afraid to tell someone you love them, for surely it is in not knowing that the branch withers and the root gnarls?

I sense some more work coming concerning intimacy, endearment, friendship, loss. Fertile soil indeed for ever richer contributions.

Acorns 'n Oak trees. Just add sun from the heart and water from the mind.

goin'_to_the_PS

good, living proof that simple is better

Raphael

Really beautiful poem, good structure in it, and a message that's easy to associate with. You have outdone yourself again good sir!