Can someone in IT/IS have a look at my CV

skinny90

Hi,
Im sure this comes up a lot but I am a recent graduate in Business Information Systems. Like many graduates i've applied for many grad roles which tend to be broad, sometimes its difficult enough to figure out how I can tailor my resume. My next challenge is that my degree in nature is very broad and I find it hard to focus on how I can apply it to certain up coming roles. Is their any body/ recruitment company who can assess ones resume and overall strategy when applying.

Thanks

Skinny

Stheno

YOu could post it up here with your personal details redacted?

skinny90

never knew I could do that:rolleyes: I have attached a resume. Be as critical as much as you can however, I will say I just quickly converted it from PDF as well as edit out personal details so their might be a few formatting errors.

Stheno

skinny90 wrote: »

never knew I could do that:rolleyes: I have attached a resume. Be as critical as much as you can however, I will say I just quickly converted it from PDF as well as edit out personal details so their might be a few formatting errors.

Ok so first off, I'd wonder what sort of roles you are applying for?

Secondly, your professional summary is very generic, I'd be putting in stuff like the Microsoft funding in there to help you stand out and show your achievements, rather than the very vanilla info you have.

Secondly, instead of listing off the raft of areas you covered for your degree, put them into an actual list, and show what ones you've used on work experience, you reference being familiar with some in your achievements/interests section but how is not clear.

skinny90

Types of jobs I have applied for would be Business Analyst, technology analyst, SAP analyst grad roles.
I have also applied for many technical and support roles.
Thanks for the feedback on the professional summary, I don't always use that format but I agree completely on what you have said especially throwing I things to stand out now that I think about it. Especially on examples on how I've used my degree. My main issue here would be trying to document how I've used them very briefly. As you can tell there's alot of work experience highlighted... Would you take away some work experience to make space on highlighting how I've used my skills. Would keep the relevant topics I've covered also?

Stheno

Take a look at the changes I've made and see if it makes a difference to you if you were reading both.

We can move on from there.

Others will be along with their opinons

Mrs OBumble

Have you named your secondary school? (Am guessing you've just taken it out to keep the CV anonymous for here.)

Take the Final Grade Average out: don't want to sound mean, but "self-driven learners with a passion to succeed get more than 61%" is what a lot of readers would think.

Put the key skills at the top - in your case just under professional summary. And put the Microsoft funded project into the processional summary.

Take the ECDL out. ECDL means "I can't use computers for sh**" but needed to do a course to make people think I can" (again - this sounds harsh, but it's what lots think).

Don't split the work experience into relevant and other: all commercial experience is relevant, especially what you learned about customer service and retail transactions and logistics on the shop-floor at Currys.

Lose the underlining: underlining is for typewriters, and people who don't know about design or how to use different font sizes.

Your job at Lionbridge - I guess this was a placement as part of the course? Add that - otherwise it looks a bit odd that you were working full time in the depths of Mayo while you were supposed to be studying in Galway.

skinny90

@Stheno I guess creative writing isn't my strongest...content is more or less the same but how you've worded it does sound more appealing.
@mrs o bumble-yes I took the name out. I agree with all your points, perhaps change the 61% to 2.1. Majority company's look for 2.1 but I get your the rest of your points mentions. Thanks for shredding it, I mean it in the nicest way possible :-)