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happyholly

terrible things can happen
on beautiful days like these
from one simple tear
your brought down to your knees.
the dark that crawls and haunts the light
the cold shiver of destiny's bite.

i had a date with destiny
but she never showed
don't want your pity
just want what i'm owed
packed my soul and headed on home
there's no shame in dying alone.

mid fifties

happyholly wrote: »

terrible things can happen
on beautiful days like these
from one simple tear
your brought down to your knees.
the dark that crawls and haunts the light
the cold shiver of destiny's bite.

i had a date with destiny
but she never showed
don't want your pity
just want what i'm owed
packed my soul and headed on home
there's no shame in dying alone.

I really like this but you need at lease one more verse, would it be okay if i rearrange some of the lines just to see what i can come up with and if that is okay then you got to put another verse to this, let me know what you think.

happyholly

hi feel free to edit

mid fifties

Okay will see what i can come up, any chance of another verse from you and no worries if some of the words dont rhyme i just need another six lines so i have more to work on, no hurry will be a few days before i get a chance to try anything.

mid fifties

Okay will see what i can come up with, any chance of another verse from you and no worries if some of the words dont rhyme i just need another six lines so i have more to work on, no hurry will be a few days before i get a chance to try anything.

happyholly

terrible things can happen
on beautiful days like these
from one simple tear
your brought down to your knees.
the dark that crawls and haunts the light
the cold shiver of destiny's bite.

i had a date with destiny
but she never showed
don't want your pity
just want what i'm owed
packed my soul and headed on home
there's no shame in dying alone.

when it comes to love, I'm a non believer
but that all changed, first time a seen her.
she took my love and it never came back
she took my heart when it was all i had
took my soul and it never came back
she took my love all she left me was black.

mid fifties

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