Is this a good cover letter

Hollister11

Whats this like for a cover letter, I'm desperate for a job, and I need any

Dear Sir/Madam.

I came across an advertisement for a sales assistant on Indeed.ie and I’m very interested in working with [""]. I have enclosed a copy of my current CV for you to review. I’m available for full-time or part-time employment from May 15th to mid-September, and after that I would only be available for part-time work.

I have one year work experience in [""]. While working in this role, I was able to enhance my communication skills and my customer assistant, this was done by communicating daily with the customers by answering any queries that they would have had. I was responsible for keeping the stock level in order, so that there was always a sufficient level of stock available for the customers. I was also required to operate the till by carrying out transaction, accepting payment through different methods such as cash and cards, and providing the correct change to the customers.

My skills include operating the tills, dealing with customer who have queries or issues and I have excellent IT skills (Microsoft Excel, Microsoft Word, Microsoft Access, graphic software). I’m good with money and numeracy. I’m always willing to learn any necessary skills that will be needed in order to be ready for employment in your company.

In reviewing your organizations objectives and goals, as set out in the job description, I believe that my willingness to learn and achieve would fit the needs of what you are looking for. I’m also confident that your organization can help me to enhance my performance levels. I would be very interested in speaking with you to discuss my CV and potential employment further and look forward to hearing from you soon.

Regards
[""]

Tasden

I'd take out the "I came across an ad...", and just put in "I wish to apply for the position of "", as advertised on indeed..."

househero

No.

Don't mention you will only be available until sept. Its a reason to not interview you.

Hollister11

Thanks, Ill change my CV, any more advice ?

HarrietD

I think it is far too long and also agree with the other 2 posters comments. Most of the information should be on your CV and therefore repeating yourself. You risk losing the readers interest. The tone of your letter suggests that you are looking more to gain work experience rather than being a useful employee from Day one particularly when you only see it as a summer job.
Best of luck

Iquestionstuff

Dont mean too sound harsh but your saying too much in your cover letter. Personally the shorter and to the point the better. You want to make them want to read your CV. The CV is where they can find out the finer details if they are interested. So with that in mind, id go with something along the lines of. Plus instead of till experience say cash handling
.

I have enclosed a copy of my current CV for you to review. I’m available for full-time employment from May 15th.

I have experience in [""]. While working in this role, I enhanced my communication skills and my customer service skills, this was done by communicating daily with customers, by answering any queries that they had. I was responsible for keeping the stock level in order, so that there was always a sufficient level of stock available for the customers. I was also required to operate the till by carrying out transactions accurately, assisting payment through different methods such as cash and cards.

My skills include cash handling, dealing with customer who have queries or issues and I have excellent IT skills (Microsoft Excel, Microsoft Word, Microsoft Access, graphic software). I’m always willing to learn any necessary skills that will be needed in order to be ready for employment in your company.

I know that my willingness to learn and achieve would fit the needs of what you are looking for. I would be very interested in speaking with you to discuss my CV and potential employment further and look forward to hearing from you soon.

Regards,
[""]

TheBustedFlush

Maybe make a couple of changes to that:

I enclose a copy of my current CV for you to review. I’m available for full-time employment from May 15th.

I have experience in [""]. While working in this role, I enhanced my communication skills and my customer service skills through communicating daily with customers and answering any queries that they had. I was responsible for monitoring stock levels so that there was always a sufficient supply of goods available for customers. I also operated the till carrying out transactions accurately and dealing with different payment methods such as cash and credit/debit cards.

My skills include cash handling, dealing with customer queries or issues and I have excellent IT skills (Microsoft Excel, Microsoft Word, Microsoft Access, graphic software). I’m very willing to learn any necessary additional skills to be ready for employment in your company.

I know that my willingness to learn and achieve would fit the needs of what you are looking for. I'd welcome an opportunity to meet you to discuss my CV and potential employment in [name of company].

I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Regards,
[""]

drunkmonkey

I'd stop after the first paragraph just mention your skills in it, excel, cash handling, no fluff, I'd tuned out by the second paragraph.

If you can only do part time after September, mention the days as in Saturday or Sunday as that could be a reason to call you, most full timers usually want them off and a good employee who is only happy to work weekend can be a godsend. Are you in college I'm guessing, say you will be also available during college holidays, eg your good to work Easter and Xmas.

Keep it short, no bull just facts.

Hollister11

Thanks for all the advice, I'll apply the changes and hopefully have some luck in securing a job.

dudara

From my perspective, I dislike the use of "I'm" and I would replace with 'I am". It's stronger sounding.

When it comes to your availability post-September, I would write it along the lines of "I am available on a full-time basis until XX September, and on a part-time basis thereafter" (It would be even better if you could specify your available days from September onwards).

Irish_Elect_Eng

Dear Sir/Madam.

- Find out their name, the biggest complimaent to anybody is knowing/remembering their name,

I came across an advertisement for a sales assistant on

- I wish to apply for the advertised position of Sales Assistant (Capitailse)

I’m available for full-time or part-time employment from May 15th to mid-September, and after that I would only be available for part-time work.

- I am available to start immediately.

I have one year work experience in [""]. While working in this role, I was able to enhance my communication skills and my customer assistant, this was done by communicating daily with the customers by answering any queries that they would have had.

- I have one year of highly relevant work experience in a similar role while employed by [""]. (Important! State what benefit you brought to the company not yourself) In this role, I enjoyed working with customers using my communication and problem solving skills in my role as customer assistant, in particular I enjoyed improving our customers experience by resolving any queries or issues the customer had while in our store.

I was responsible for keeping the stock level in order, so that there was always a sufficient level of stock available for the customers. I was also required to operate the till by carrying out transactions accurately, assisting payment through different methods such as cash and cards.

- I had responsibility for maintaining appropriate stock levels, in department x for products y, approximately z number of products. I also operated point of sales equipment, handling cash, processing electronic payments, discount vouchers and issuing/receiving gift cards.

My skills include operating the tills, dealing with customer who have queries or issues and I have excellent IT skills (Microsoft Excel, Microsoft Word, Microsoft Access, graphic software). I’m good with money and numeracy. I’m always willing to learn any necessary skills that will be needed in order to be ready for employment in your company.

- I have excellent IT skills, proficient with Microsoft Office Tools in a retail work environment. I am a quick learner and enjoy learning the company specific skills needed to excel in a new workplace.

In reviewing your organizations objectives and goals, as set out in the job description, I believe that my willingness to learn and achieve would fit the needs of what you are looking for. I’m also confident that your organization can help me to enhance my performance levels. I would be very interested in speaking with you to discuss my CV and potential employment further and look forward to hearing from you soon.

- Rewrite this whole section demonstrating what you will do for them, after all that's why they will be paying you, they will not overly care what you get out of it. If you do quote their goal, be specific.