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need short film script critiqued

  • 27-07-2013 10:48am
    #1
    thedurco
    Registered Users, Registered Users 2 Posts: 4 ✭


    Going into production in September for my short film. Need to do a rewrite. Just wondering if someone/s would take a look and just let me know what they think e.g. what they liked/disliked. Its only 6 pages long. Thanks for your time.


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  • #2
    smcgiff
    Closed Accounts Posts: 5,943 ✭✭✭smcgiff


    Very good - I enjoyed it. I could imagine how it would be filmed.

    There was one or two elements that I thought would be hard to film that may not need be in the script, such as the hero trying not to look like a stalker.

    The other bit that jarred was the hero stealing a drink. Would that really impress, seemed too much like fantasy there rather than the real action.

    Well done.

    Forgot to mention... The silent nature and mishaps did lead me to compare to Mr Bean.


  • #3
    thedurco
    Registered Users, Registered Users 2 Posts: 4 ✭thedurco


    Thanks smcgiff for taking the time. Agreed with ya on your points.

    Trying not to go down the Mr. Bean route, hopefully get the tone right when going to shoot.


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