New Short Film - critique

roguey

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=89ZGMyji6Io

This is the first short I have made. Comments welcome. Some advice on framing the shot (as I feel I have difficulty picking the right shot) and the editing would be helpful.

The whole film was shot in about 2 hours, and with one actor pretty much. It had no story really, we just made it up as we went along I suppose. So dont be too mean Shot on a Canon HV20 and a Rode Videomic

grumula

pretty good,
a couple of slight hiccups, (0:53 and 1:27).
the shot progression could be a bit brisker too, but really nice job, the camera work was entertaining, the music was well suited, the background noise was fairly equalised, i'm sure you'll be lashing out some fairly great stuff soon if ya keep screwinj' round!

Tealplayboymmc

Really liked it. Once or twice the transitions were a bit shaky like the door in the car park changing from car park to stair case and a Tripod shot to handheld on the stairs but other than that it was really good.
Where abouts you from ?
Good location choice.
Im currently working on a 12min Film short for college

west20s

Definitly on par with my first short.Liked it.What kind of cam did you use? F . Y. I..........A Short of that calibre will get you into certain festivals but most wont except if it has been previously aired online...

adamses84

watch ur compression when you upload to youtube, you lost a lot

roguey

thanks for all the feedback guys, much apreciated.

Hopefully making another short this week so i'll post that up here when its done.

adamses84 wrote: »

watch ur compression when you upload to youtube, you lost a lot

Yeah, tell me about it, tried different export settings, did no work out!
Anybody got good export settings for Premiere Pro?

reece

I find the h264 vimeo media encoder preset to be good. One thing I noticed with utube is your initial upload settings won't be great. Once your video starts to get popular they tend to up the quality. My clip started out with ok quality but after about 30k hits the quality changed -

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QE2xNtjJeC0

andyterryjay

very nice. as you said no real story, but the shots were good and i know what its like to basically improv a short video. haha so well done on that.

check out my youtube channel, i subscribed to you, so if you want a fellow young film maker to talk to.

http://www.youtube.com/andyterryjay

i make short films and have done so for about 3 years, i am only nearly 17 so i am happy with how far i have come.

Trigger76

Great job really like, I've literally just popped on to this forum for the first time as I want to do a bit more than just stills with my 7d, your vid is the first one Ive looked at and Im well impressed...well done, Id be delighted with something like that as a first effort:D