Feedback on my song

crazy chester

Hi could i get some feedback on this?

Any feedback would be grately appreciated!
Thanks in advance!

Crazy Chester

http://soundcloud.com/crazy-chester

kelle

I really like it!

I love your voice and the instumental.

If there's one small criticism I could make, it's that the the second verse seems to be of the same tone as the chorus so it feels like a continuation of the chorus which makes it seem to go on forever. But, all the same, I find myself waiting for the chorus and then singing it alond.

Good luck with your song!

crazy chester

Thanks very much!

Thats the problem i had, i have 6 verses in total telling the whole story but the song lasted over 5 minutes so in cutting the time back i had to sacrifice 2 verses.
If i post the full song would you have a listen and give me an idea if either of the 2 verses i cut would suit better?

And thanks again for your feedback, really appreciate it!:)

kelle

I'll do that Chester.

I only discovered this forum today, as somebody who really loves music I'm enjoying it

Tallon

I really enjoyed that.

As kelle says, you have a great voice and the music was really nice

crazy chester

Again thanks for the positive reply!

I had a look at your request for a song there Tallon and ill have a go over the weekend for ye!

Kelle, Ill post the "extended":D version when i get home this evening

Crazy chester

Tallon

crazy chester wrote: »

I had a look at your request for a song there Tallon and ill have a go over the weekend for ye!

haha, that would be brilliant

Thanks

crazy chester

Hi kelle but for some reason i cant upload the long version of the song. Il post lyrics instead to give you an idea?

kelle

Are you able to send it by PM?

Did you write it yourself?

CockleHocker

Hi Chester. I have to say right off, that I'm not a big fan of country at all, but I really enjoyed this. The lyrics really tugged on my heartstrings. The guitar work was great and you have a really nice voice.
It's pretty damn catchy as well!
Well done!

crazy chester

PM sent

Yes i wrote the song.

Thanks again for taking the time to listen and comment.

kelle

Hi, Chester

I was listening to the song again, the third verse had me in tears! Now a lot of listeners love to have a verse that tugs at their heartstrings like that (my dear mother did, Lord rest her!), but I personally would prefer it replaced by the second verse you sent by PM

(The men they say, soon this killing will end
I pray to Good it will
Then we will marry at the old church bell
And build our house on the hill)

crazy chester

Thank you so much for your input! I will change the verses around. Cant believe I nearly had you in tears! Dont mean to sound funny but im kinda happy i can evoke those emotions through my song!

Once again thanks for all the positive feedback!"

crazy chester

Ok folks ive posted a few more tracks and also looking for some feedback on these.

**Please note these were recorded last year as a rough reminder so i wouldnt forget the melody, structure etc..:rolleyes: and they are first takes so the vocals and guitar work are very VERY ropey!:D**

Any feedback welcome! Thanks!

http://soundcloud.com/crazy-chester/shine-on

http://soundcloud.com/crazy-chester/its-too-late

http://soundcloud.com/crazy-chester/midnight-legend