Forever The Echoing Whispers

shopinie

I was sitting in work one day and was waiting to do styling on a lady However the lady met another lady when she walked into the store and started gossiping about a lady who had died tragically two weeks earlier, Without even thinking about it I sat at the computer and while they were talking I wrote this piece. hope it makes sense to you, I write about the moment it helps to get rid of what is in my head.

Forever the echoing whispers go willowing through the trees

touching each and every ear, while bringing someone to their knees

Gossips hover all around driving daggers through the ground

their voices hold no justice, just venom in their sound

and what of the ones they talk about? what damage to their soul

the gossips have no heed of thought as their mighty tongues unfold

they will not be there to see the pain their twisted tongues have caused

for if they were , just maybe then, their wicked words be paused

Remember then you of idol mouths, choose carefully what you say

for whatever hurt you cause this night, will come back to you one day

Forever the echoing whispers that you send willowing through the trees

will touch the ear of another fool, and bring you to your knees.

carrie848

It was very descriptive and the imagery was great. It certainly has something. I liked it quite a lot, very imaginative.

PurpleBee

It has too much of a puritanical edge for me. If you happen to be the only person in the world who doesn't gossip then maybe you at least have some moral authority but if not, then you seem to have lost that too.

It reads quite well though.

Killer_banana

As PurpleBee said it is very puritanical. It's very well written though and I love the descriptions. I thought the last line was very powerful.