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The Pretender

  • 15-12-2009 12:57pm
    #1
    Insect Overlord
    Moderators, Social & Fun Moderators, Society & Culture Moderators Posts: 30,972 Mod ✭✭✭✭


    The Pretender

    The opaque glass of a closed shop window
    Acts as camouflage behind his dark shirt,
    The crisp, ironed edges of which belie
    The truth of his softness underneath it.
    He is cold. The hair of his hand stands up,
    Exposed fingers clasping a plastic bag,
    And he shivers away the second last
    Saturday night of August, standing there.

    This waiting game, prelude to the first act,
    Ends as a familiar car pulls close and
    He pretends the lift does nothing to raise
    His spirits, the cold of the night hidden
    By his cool exterior and denied
    With half a smile. He warms up as they drive.

    Later, under lights, he is the centre
    Of attention, mysterious, with one
    Eye hidden by a sharply tilted hat,
    Sparkling ear-ring and bright white tie, flashing
    A smile at anyone who meets his gaze,
    Teasing them by dancing from their contact.

    With some comfort from this costume, he can
    Fool watching eyes with an illusion of
    Self-confidence, almost convince himself
    That all is well, that it will be okay...


Comments

  • #2
    Insect Overlord
    Moderators, Social & Fun Moderators, Society & Culture Moderators Posts: 30,972 Mod ✭✭✭✭Insect Overlord


    Feedback of any kind is welcome, even if that's just a simple "Like it/Hate it/Meh" with a line or two of a reaction :)


  • #3
    Black Swan
    Moderators, Category Moderators, Science, Health & Environment Moderators, Society & Culture Moderators Posts: 47,537 CMod ✭✭✭✭Black Swan


    Insect Overlord wrote: »
    Feedback of any kind is welcome, even if that's just a simple "Like it/Hate it/Meh" with a line or two of a reaction :)
    I like it! But why don't you write a bit more, and not end it where you did? More?


  • #4
    Insect Overlord
    Moderators, Social & Fun Moderators, Society & Culture Moderators Posts: 30,972 Mod ✭✭✭✭Insect Overlord


    Blue_Lagoon wrote: »
    I like it! But why don't you write a bit more, and not end it where you did? More?

    I'm thinking of writing a sequel to it, but it'll be a while before I can put "act 2" into poetic language. Let's just say the story behind the poem left a bitter after-taste!

    As for extending this one? I had to stop writing it when I ran out of synonyms to continue the metaphor :o


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