I'll Take Today

Mulan

what ya think? Its soft and jazzy kind of!

I’ll take today

They say a money win could change it all
I guess it could my friend, but just might make you fall
It’s true sometimes we wish our lives away[/FONT]
But somehow I’m just happy for today.

I’ll take today,
da, da da da da da
Daaaaaaa da

Chorus
Today you’re here and love me
Tomorrow could be blue
Today we live with hopes and dreams
I’ll take today wont you.
I’ll take today,
da, da da da da da
Daaaaaaa da

Wishing wells are full with coins and dollars
Paying for the prayers to rid our sorrows.
Life gives up the answers to our quest
It makes us strong and sorts us from the rest.

Chorus
Today you’re here and love me
Tomorrow could be blue
Today we live with hopes and dreams
I’ll take today wont you.

I’ll take today,
da, da da da da da
Daaaaaaa da

As the sun breaks the darkness outside the door
The day will come so bright, real bright, for you I’m sure
Don’t waste that time you got, it happens to be free
Take a leaf and shine your light, its something to believe.
I’ll take today,
da, da da da da da
Daaaaaaa da



Copyright (MKM) Productions 2008

Mulan

Dont know what happened there!

humberklog

Hope you don't mind. I liked it that much I tought to clean it up for a clearer look see.

Mulan you might get more feedback if you were to input into other people's work. Go on let fly.

tbaymusicman

reads like a poem i like it wats the da da da you humming or music??

Mulan

Hi guys

Thanks for cleaning it up Humberklog and for the comments. I'll be abit more active in future.
The DA,DA,DA etc is really the sound of the song, the feel. I whistle it at the moment but in my head its a soft Sax or a something else with that kind of sound. The drum beat is with brushes and again all soft. I'd would love to get into a studio and add strings etc to it. To be honest there is one particular artist out there that I think would do a great job on it. But i'd like to get it into a studio myself first.
Can anyone give me advice on this.
I'd like to do it sometime this year. Money really is the prob.

All comments please
Thanks

Whiskey Devil

It's all a little cliche.. some of the lines are forced and seem awkward..

"The day will come so bright, real bright, for you I’m sure"


On the positive side most of it flows well but I'd have to hear music to form an opinion on it.


G'luck.

Mulan

Thanks for that.
I'm going to record it soon and hopefully it will be on myspace then.

Cheers

Whiskey Devil

Didn't mean to be harsh.. Look forward to hearing it.