a day of darkness

busted flush

There was once a morning when we awoke to darkness. It was well past the hour of light but mountains lay without shadow, their crests seamless to the sky, for even the moon had become redundant in the dark. We stood on street corners and gazed to the sky, but only the street lamps shone and their light gave us no warmth against a night cold that now governed the day. Nervous workers stuttered to a start, hesitant in duty but eager nonetheless to enter the familiar clusters and discuss the absent sun. I followed myself, as curiosity gave way to cold and began my working day with no real interest in work at all. The gathered groups followed a similar thread, questions and queries, answers and theories, but all was in vain because none could say he’d seen this before, none could say the sun would return.

ElCrapula

Possibly one of the best things Ive read in this section of boards.Nice work.
A lovely rhythm and flow.Very poetic style.Id love to read more.

Insect Overlord

+1

Very nice indeed. Reminds me of something I wrote myself, in a small way.

rockbeer

Excellent.

And it turns out you can use a spell checker

busted flush

I must admit i quiet like this peice too !

sitout

busted flush wrote: »

peice

It was good while it lasted!:P

magicass

busted flush wrote: »

There was once a morning when we awoke to darkness. It was well past the hour of light but mountains lay without shadow, their crests seamless to the sky, for even the moon had become redundant in the dark. We stood on street corners and gazed to the sky, but only the street lamps shone and their light gave us no warmth against a night cold that now governed the day. Nervous workers stuttered to a start, hesitant in duty but eager nonetheless to enter the familiar clusters and discuss the absent sun. I followed myself, as curiosity gave way to cold and began my working day with no real interest in work at all. The gathered groups followed a similar thread, questions and queries, answers and theories, but all was in vain because none could say he’d seen this before, none could say the sun would return.

wow, very nice.

Matt Holck

so did the sun rays strike the mountain peaks while the we were already in shadow?

busted flush

Matt Holck wrote: »

so did the sun rays strike the mountain peaks while the we were already in shadow?

I think your trying to get me barred again matt. well thats my new years resolution matt (not to be ).

sitout

busted flush wrote: »

I think your trying to get me barred again Matt. well thats my new years resolution Matt (not to be ).

Come on man, dont be so shrill.

busted flush

thanks for all the positive comments

sitout

busted flush wrote: »

thanks for all the positive comments

your welcome , it is a beautiful piece of writing.

magicass

sitout wrote: »

, it is a beautiful piece of writing.

+1

Fartmonger

This is really nice. Makes me think of Kafka :P