almost raped

busted flush

Her wet long tongue fondled my freshly brushed minty mouth. Wow i liked it! She pressed hard into my levi's ,**** as if they were not tight enough. I was like new born fawn all dazed and confused fumbeling to get some sort of balance.She was like an assisan on a mission ticking of the boxes as she went. Now i wish i had lied, i wish i had said "sex, naw not yet im waiting for the right person, but someday....yea someday". suddenly she was on her knees pulling hard on my belt, then magistically unbuttoning my fly. "****" i thought, theres no going back now!
Then as she whipped of my jocks ,she stood before me,i as naked as the day i was born and her .....fully clothed.
"i cant" she said(i was throbbing),"i cant sorry",and she ran out through the front door, with me stark naked,fully arroused and unable to pull my pants up for at least 3 minutes........."i hope no one comes in"

Insect Overlord

busted flush wrote: »

Her wet long tongue fondled..."i hope no one comes in"

Probably the most graphic one yet Busted! You should put them all together in one thread sometime, it would make for a fascinating (if somewhat disturbing!) reading experience.

rockbeer

Don't want to sound all PC but this wasn't almost 'rape', or anything remotely like it: your character is fully consenting. Rape is a serious issue for people it happens to; this kind of thing just devalues the word.

As for the writing, well that's pretty dreadful too. Your makey uppey words gave me a good laugh though... assisan? magistically? What language is this?

Insect Overlord

I can see this thread getting controversial :rolleyes:

busted flush

rockbeer wrote: »

Don't want to sound all PC but

lol

busted flush

rockbeer wrote: »

Your makey uppey words gave me a good laugh though... assassin? majestically? What language is this?

"makey" "uppey" mmmmm. All jokes aside i'm no speller I'm more a teller. lol @ your pc slant though IL bet you felt real good about yourself when you posted it! ps rape is no joke!(wow i actually feel real good now that Ive typed that so this is what it feels like to be a arrogant, condescending, stuck up nobody who likes to troll other peoples work in the search of self righteousness. Its a tad bitter though so il stick with being just me warts and all!

happyoutscan

This is just stupid. She left because when she got your jocks off, she seen your tiny todger and no way was she gonna lose her virginity to that.

busted flush

happyoutscan wrote: »

This is just stupid. She left because when she got your jocks off, she seen your tiny todger and no way was she gonna lose her virginity to that.

now this is more like it ! thats the kind of perspective(even though its totally inaccurate) im looking for. Good on you brother.

Sarky

busted flush wrote: »

"(wow i actually feel real good now that Ive typed that so this is what it feels like to be a arrogant, condescending, stuck up nobody who likes to troll other peoples work in the search of self righteousness.

Shame you'll never know the feeling of being an arrogant, condescending, stuck up nobody who likes to ban people for personal abuse. I've warned you before about that.

carlrac

If you were that aroused, how come it took you a whole 3 minutes to finish yourself off? :rolleyes:

sitout

:Dbusted has been busted . lol. see you in a month.:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

Sarky

sitout wrote: »

:Dbusted has been busted . lol. see you in a month.:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

I ended up shortening the ban to a week. Now don't you look foolish? Don't taunt, kids, things like that will happen.

Now everyone get back on topic.

smcgiff

Nah - No good. It lacked a climax! :pac:

RandolphEsq

I didn't see that ending cumming

claire h

I think that pretty offensive and misleading title is actually 'on topic', to be fair. But it's not a great piece of writing either.

MojoMaker

Sometimes it's difficult and challenging to write poorly, I applaud the OP.

randylonghorn

Not being PC about it, busted, but there is a difference between being raped and being in a situation where the woman takes control.

I sure wouldn't fancy the first, but lying (in this case standing) there and surrendering control can be hawt as fcuk.

But your title is so inaccurate that it takes away from any value the piece might have.

No offense, dude, but your writing's not great, not yet anyway.

But you do manage to tell a little story in what, 8 lines? And to get across how you felt to some extent ...

Lots of people who use multisyllabic words and spell correctly find that a difficult enough thing to do.

busted flush

randylonghorn wrote: »

you do manage to tell a little story in what, 8 lines? And to get across how you felt to some extent ...

Lots of people who use multisyllabic words and spell correctly find that a difficult enough thing to do.

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magicass

randylonghorn wrote: »

Not being PC about it, busted, but

this is where i stoped reading;)

busted flush

magicass wrote: »

this is where i stoped reading;)

This has already been discussed there is no need to drudge up the past!

Robin_Blinds

what a load of crap. rape is a serious issue and this disgusting.