Orchids and Oil.

RedRaven

I wrote this at lunch yesterday...Its a little story/poem with a bit of sadness, success of a village Nak Muay....

I hope you can read it like a poem and are familiar with Muay Thai to understand it...if not thanks for reading and hope I havent wasted too much of your time.

Orchids and Oil

Our land she bears no fruit
and the crop will now fall,
middlemen and markets
dont wait on idol stalls.

If I do not rise and leave
then I know my sister will,
to close her eyes and lose her pride
so we can pay the bill.

The blessed monk he sees me
before my Wai to all,
The train it takes me near to hear
the stadiums eternal call.

Bangkok lights sting my eyes
with the poisoned tuk tuk air.
As I wipe my eyes with my familys hope
on these shoulders I now bare.

The baht it weighs heavy
in the hot in Lumpinee air,
I step the rope like a champion
as only champions dare.

I dance to the rhythm
of the sacred step.
I remember my Kru
and knowledge
which I have always kept.

When he gave it to me
to honour our proud past
I promised to give it too
and in our peoples it will last.

The moth it flies high
to kiss the stadium light,
I Nak Muay
now stand ready to fight

The ringing bell calls us
to our deadly embrace
who was once my Thai brother
now an enemy I must face.


Two scorpions we dance
like a violent sweet ballet
crowds urge me forward
to snatch victory away,

As we move to tunes
of the ancient song
The sok reigns down on me
I see my Mongkon

Blessed it protects me
from the stings of 3000 years
I must rise and fight
to save my familys tears.

The chess game it ends
with our last fierce embrace
His flesh it gives way
to a 100mph pace.

A quick glance to him laying
With that frozen broken stare
I feel for his family
as their cupboards will stay bare.

The crowd now chant my name
for this primal deed Ive done
Ive earned them many riches
Im now a stadium son.

A smiling old man collects baht
as he did not guess,
he recognized Muay Lek
in our violent game of chess.

I now return home
to expel all hollow fear,
the money I have bled
will keep us til next year,



My sister stays pure and clean
and will have her wedding day,
Forever she remembers my sacrifice
as we grow old and grey.


As the Siam moon she turns
our gods have taken my best years,
I cant go on forever
or risk the stadiums jeers.

The crowds will no longer love me
if I cannot win their hearts,
but baht and bet have entwined
and enslaved this noble art.

So if when you see me in the field
or stamp the blooded mat,
Know my name forever
on this mortal coil

as forever I stay chained.........

by orchids and oil.

By
RedRaven
Dublin
Ireland

Nothingcompares

nice poem, if i may be so bold to suggest the rhyming structure gets lost a bit in some of the verses otherwise a very pretty poem.

RedRaven

Nothingcompares wrote: »

nice poem, if i may be so bold to suggest the rhyming structure gets lost a bit in some of the verses otherwise a very pretty poem.

Thanks...I thought that myself at first but if you read it a few times a slight shift in the reading patterns will compensate...anyway I dont write poetry much so I suppose I can be forgiven.

I know its long and hard work to read and wont be for everybody.

Thanks for again reading it.

Khannie

Really good. Nice imagery. I think that having been in Thailand really helps to "get" it.

RedRaven

Khannie wrote: »

Really good. Nice imagery. I think that having been in Thailand really helps to "get" it.

Yes Khannie, it does help who ever reads it....apart from some of the words being strange...but the story and way of life over there...I dont think some poeple will get it but I glad you did.

ScumLord

I didn't read them poem but I'm uncultured so I think it's ****e.

RedRaven

ScumLord wrote: »

I didn't read them poem but I'm uncultured so I think it's ****e.

Yeah thats makes sense..."I didnt read it but I think its ****e"........you should come training with us some day....I will show you a bit of culture...and I will also present you with your darwin award!!

ScumLord

RedRaven wrote: »

Yeah thats makes sense..."I didnt read it but I think its ****e"........you should come training with us some day....I will show you a bit of culture...!

Is that gay taljk for you'll rapr my anus?

RuggieBear

scumlord banned 6 months.

back on topic people.

RedRaven

RuggieBear wrote: »

scumlord banned 6 months.

back on topic people.

And swift justice was handed down upon thee on the day of the Lord.

tallaght01

It's a really good poem, IMO. I read it out of boredom more than anything else. I'm not a huge fan of poetry, especially amateur stuff on random websites.

But i really liked this. I culd totally picture the guy and his family. It was a really nice story. Very descriptive.

Good work

RedRaven

tallaght01 wrote: »

It's a really good poem, IMO. I read it out of boredom more than anything else. I'm not a huge fan of poetry, especially amateur stuff on random websites.

But i really liked this. I culd totally picture the guy and his family. It was a really nice story. Very descriptive.

Good work

Thanks.:)

j walsh

excellent poem Redraven if your Muay thai is as good then your a dangerous man:D.

RedRaven

j walsh wrote: »

excellent poem Redraven if your Muay thai is as good then your a dangerous man:D.

HaHa....Thanks J.