To be there

Ready to Rock

Hi Folks,

I have wrote this song one day out of the blue, I always knew i wanted to put pen to paper and when least expected it came to me. i have gone back to it many time to change it and think that I have finally finished it.

I would love to put an arrangement behind it, if anybody wants to try it - its got an upbeat mellow feeling behind it.

Can i have your thoughts on the lyrics? the song is called "to be there"


Well I tell you a story, from the start, it aint got no end
A flame that’s burning away
some drive an passion, how much do I care
From above the light is shining


It’s taken so many times to light that flame
Fuelled with spirit knockin on you’re door
So much vice and not enough virtue
Almost took the flame away

Chorus
To be there, to be there,
Looking outside, you wanna get there
I know, maybe they don’t know
I know, maybe they don’t care.

I never thought your door was always open
Staring back, remembering them days
hope there gone, gone forever

Don’t let it die away, keep on knocking
So hard on yourself it aint the right way
Enjoy, walking through the doorway
These are the words of a northern star

chorus

Burial

*Sigh* Boards signed me out so my reply was wasted... Anyway, I'll try to remember the post as best as i can.

I wouldn't call it to be there, though it has grown on me as a title. I was going to call my version "Old Flame (Dying young)". I'm not sure why. Anyway, here is my version on your lyrics, I don't know why I did them, but I did. Tell me what you think. I didn't like the rythem in your one, it doesn't seem to flow. Maybe thats just me. Anyway, this is the first song I've written ever thats finished and I quite like it. Can I bring it over to a friends house and make a full song out of it??? (He may use it in his band or what not is that ok too?) In my version imagine an Artic monkeys / Reverend and the Makers type style.


Time for a story, told from the start,
A burning flame, thought never ending,
some drive an passion, how much do I care
Seen from my eyes, the light is blinding.


It’s taken so many times, to light this fire,
Just fuelled with, my spirit and desire,
As much vice, as little virtue,
Dont take the flame away,
As it's all I have, I have left of you.


Chorus:

To be there, to be there,
You don't want me to be there.
I know, I know,
You don’t care.

Never going back,
Nor remembering those days
Just glad they're gone,
And gone for good!


Don’t let it die, not right now anyway,
Just give me one more chance, love,
I'll swear, I'll make it work,
Else I'll keep knocking,
And never be on my way!

Chorus x 2

This is the basic jist of what I was going to write. I can't remember two lines. (There's more I've forgotten.)

*EDIT*

I wanted to post this so I don't loose it again as I enjoyed writing that and now to criticise your lyrics now! Seriously though your lyrics are fine, but my only complaint is that I don't get how they go rythemly. Whats the song about? I don't get that part either.

Ready to Rock

Hey there,

for sure, please have a go at it and if you can record it and put it somewhere I could have a listen, it would be great.

the song is pretty much about struggling to play music and a few past guidances were put in there, one has passed away and the other is a mate.

I do like your edited version. I play guitar and am at it a few years and can be pretty ****e at it for the most part but I have a new metronome that will help me improve big time.

Where abouts are you based?

Laters
R2R

Burial

Ready to Rock wrote: »

Hey there,

for sure, please have a go at it and if you can record it and put it somewhere I could have a listen, it would be great.

If we get the song done, most certainly. Though don't expect anything, anytime soon...

Ready to Rock wrote: »

the song is pretty much about struggling to play music and a few past guidances were put in there, one has passed away and the other is a mate. I do like your edited version.

Actually, now that you mention it I can see it in the lyrics more clearly...

Ready to Rock wrote: »

I play guitar and am at it a few years and can be pretty ****e at it for the most part but I have a new metronome that will help me improve big time.

Where abouts are you based?

Laters
R2R

I'm based around Limerick/Cork region. I take it your Dublin. Everyone on boards is from Dublin...

Burial wrote:

Time for a story, told from the start,
A burning flame, thought never ending,
some drive an passion, how much do I care
Seen from my eyes, the light is blinding.

I can't remember what I was going to write in the third line, and it's bugging me..

Time for a story, told from the start,
A burning flame, thoughts never ending,
(I can't remember this line)
Seen from my eyes, the light is blinding.

I'll try to write a new song tonight, and hopefully post the lyrics on boards tomorrow. So I'd like some feedback on that too if possible!

johnnysmack

well man, just put a few chords to ur song der. can i record it n il put it up on myspace in hopefully a day r two with some drum tracks thrown in. be warned, d sound quality wont b great tho!!

Ready to Rock

I'd be delighted to hear your version of it! Look forward to the link of myspace.com

Cheers
R2R