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Friends And Lovers

  • 30-03-2008 1:09pm
    #1
    Mr.Mister
    Closed Accounts Posts: 362 ✭✭



    Friends and Lovers
    by: Sinead Ciara Mc Cormick

    A friend and a lover, the worst of all kinds,
    For anyone to do it, would be out of there minds,
    Things can go right, but also go wrong,
    Don't do it unless you know you are strong.

    If your really good friends, don't mess it all up,
    You really got to know when to stop,
    If you make better lovers and want to get more,
    You both got to talk and see whats in store.

    Make sure you both know where the two of you stand,
    Cause things can go wrong with the shake of a hand,
    If this should happen and it all might end,
    You might lose your lover, more importantly a friend!

    Copyright ©2008 Sinead Ciara Mc Cormick


Comments

  • #2
    azzeretti
    Registered Users, Registered Users 2 Posts: 1,477 ✭✭✭azzeretti


    You really need to learn the difference between "your" and "you're" as well as "there" and "their".


  • #3
    Mr.Mister
    Closed Accounts Posts: 362 ✭✭Mr.Mister


    You are right there,i didn't write the thing obviously.

    I found it in the competition section on www.poetry.com and thought it was nice.

    http://www.poetry.com/Publications/display.asp?ID=P8871535&BN=999&PN=1


  • #4
    Insect Overlord
    Moderators, Social & Fun Moderators, Society & Culture Moderators Posts: 30,972 Mod ✭✭✭✭Insect Overlord


    Mr.Mister wrote: »
    You are right there,i didn't write the thing obviously.

    I found it in the competition section on www.poetry.com and thought it was nice.

    http://www.poetry.com/Publications/display.asp?ID=P8871535&BN=999&PN=1

    You probably should've mentioned that in your opening post. How were we to know you weren't Sinead Ciara Mc Cormick?

    Also, this poem should be stickied in the PI forum! :rolleyes::D


  • #5
    Mr.Mister
    Closed Accounts Posts: 362 ✭✭Mr.Mister


    An Fhile wrote: »
    You probably should've mentioned that in your opening post. How were we to know you weren't Sinead Ciara Mc Cormick?

    Also, this poem should be stickied in the PI forum! :rolleyes::D

    I would have presumed that with a name like 'Mr.Mister' in which i have,it to me would have been common practise to think that i'd be a male and not a female.

    Just my own opinion like...


  • #6
    Insect Overlord
    Moderators, Social & Fun Moderators, Society & Culture Moderators Posts: 30,972 Mod ✭✭✭✭Insect Overlord


    Mr.Mister wrote: »
    I would have presumed that with a name like 'Mr.Mister' in which i have,it to me would have been common practise to think that i'd be a male and not a female.

    Just my own opinion like...

    Ever heard of irony..? ( using "mister" like a double negative ;) )


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  • #7
    Mr.Mister
    Closed Accounts Posts: 362 ✭✭Mr.Mister


    An Fhile wrote: »
    Ever heard of irony..? ( using "mister" like a double negative ;) )

    Touche!

    I'm a guy anyway.


  • #8
    silvine
    Registered Users, Registered Users 2 Posts: 3,132 ✭✭✭silvine


    It's a little cheesy...kind of like something you'd read stuck on fridge.


  • #9
    rockbeer
    Closed Accounts Posts: 1,422 ✭✭✭rockbeer


    Trite, banal, doesn't rhyme properly, doesn't scan properly, horrible predictable childish rhythm, poor grammar and spelling, takes three stanzas to state the bleeding obvious - and even that could have been managed in a single line...

    But otherwise it's fantastic.


  • #10
    beautiation
    Closed Accounts Posts: 381 ✭✭beautiation


    rockbeer wrote: »
    Trite, banal, doesn't rhyme properly, doesn't scan properly, horrible predictable childish rhythm, poor grammar and spelling, takes three stanzas to state the bleeding obvious - and even that could have been managed in a single line...

    But otherwise it's fantastic.

    haha :pac:, yeah Sinead Ciara mc cormick can keep it tbh.


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