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My second poem

  • 19-03-2008 9:03am
    #1
    mush21
    Closed Accounts Posts: 9 ✭


    I AM YOURS TO KEEP

    You are a princess in my heart,
    and I care for you so much.
    I love the fondness in you eyes and your tender little touch.

    I looked at you when you were born,
    and knew then straight away,
    that I would be fore ever here
    to watch you grow and play.

    You bring to me a heart of joy,
    and memories so great,
    and a powerful sense of fatherhood that no one can debate.
    I watch you sleep and dream of things that I can only wonder.
    That innocent look upon your face just makes my heart grow fonder.

    I see you run and jump and shout and calling out my name.
    No love that I have ever known could ever feel the same.
    No suffering or tragedy nor deeply seated pain
    could ever over shadow the bond that we retain.

    And so my little princess before you go to sleep,
    Remember I am your daddy and I am your's to keep.:)

    (For Victoria from dad)


Comments

  • #2
    sitout
    Closed Accounts Posts: 423 ✭✭sitout


    no one read the first one why would you go and do three more . they were all pretty boring in my opinion also so my advice is to quit while your behind


  • #3
    Sarky
    Closed Accounts Posts: 31,967 ✭✭✭✭Sarky


    That's hardly constructive. I distinctly remember talking to you about that before. Cut it out.


  • #4
    Insect Overlord
    Moderators, Social & Fun Moderators, Society & Culture Moderators Posts: 30,972 Mod ✭✭✭✭Insect Overlord


    sitout wrote: »
    no one read the first one why would you go and do three more . they were all pretty boring in my opinion also so my advice is to quit while your behind

    :eek: What side of the bed did you get out of yesterday?!

    @Mush21,
    I missed this poem when it was first posted, however now that I have read it I am glad sitout brought it up. It's by far the best of the five poems, and if you can replicate the powerful feeling of love present here in your future writing then "quitting while behind" is the last thing you should do. :)


  • #5
    zenmonk
    Closed Accounts Posts: 413 ✭✭zenmonk


    Not a bad effort at all
    keep it up,
    would love to see something with a different subject matter...any chance?


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