Bits and pieces of a couple of lyrics I wrote, feedback would be great

Drodan

Writing a few bits now, going mostly for acoustic stuff, I'd really appreciate and thoughts on them, good or bad.

Havn't named this one, or finished, it's just the lastest one

Hands been out there for days
And its lost all its felling, lost all its interest
Yet nothing you say will address its own question, it just lays out for days takes no hints or suggestions
All its time with a look thats appealing
It knows where it's going, knows where it's destined
The shoulder recieving just inches away with the thoughts of Monday and how it will act

Yet this fall down Is
worse, My thoughts of her
Dont add up, don't add up to
Wake up in the
noon, shut your eyes, just shutdown
Don't add it up


I'll add more later when I have time, cheers.

eamon234

very hard to rate lyrics on their own tbh - I've heard plenty of crap lyrics that sound good in a good arrangement!