is this... sleepy enough...?

lillykay

falling asleep


down below, by moonlight bay
the ship of dreams is set to sail
upon the turning of the tide
we'll cross the ocean great and wide
on velvet seas with silent songs
i'll smoothly, softly sail along
and listen to forgotten tunes
beneath a timeless smiling moon

how i return, i never know
nor exactly where i go
and yet each morn come break of day
i'm in my bedroom wide awake...
with silver slips of memories
all thats left from ships of dreams

Nanoose2

That certainly is a lovely poem – I didn’t feel
sleepy after I read it - but only because I just got
up and haven’t even had my breakfast yet.
After reading the poem I did feel a bit hungry – maybe it
was for breakfast or maybe it was for another poem. Cheers!

Latchy

I know it's creative writing but how about a little sleepy music to keep with the theme . http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NrctNIWaN4Q

busted flush

the best way to sleep is to drop a few viocane, you will be out like trout!

buck65

Good poem