I'm writing to no one

Argie

I’m Writing to No One


Dear Someone,
I’m writing a letter
Because I felt like writing
But I’ve no one to write to
So I’m writing to no one.
The world through my window
Is so green and so blue
That I had to tell someone
And so I’m telling you.
There are millions of things
That I want you to see
So many scenes
That I want to describe
There are so many thoughts
I want you to be thinking
And so many ways
That you can feel alive.
A man walked by my window
And I could hear him sing
And the song that he sang
Was about everything.
A child skipped by my window
Her laugh floated to me
Her world shining and bouncing
What a person to be.
A tree grows on the street
It looks for no attention
But it’s so calm and so placid
That it must get a mention.
A sad man passed by me
Shoulders bent and head low
I think he tried to be happy
But just couldn’t, you know?
We’d a big storm last night
The rain madly flying
I think a new world was starting
And the old world was dying.
One man peered through my window
He stared through it, right in
I hid from his sharp eyes
The glass is really quite thin.
I’ve known the world’s magic
But each day I can see
That the magic’s for others
It’s not intended for me.
Yet I love that mad world
The wonder I’ve seen
On the other side of my window
The grass is so green.
So I wanted to write you
Because I feel like writing
But I’ve no one to write to
So I’m writing to no one.
Signed, with a strangers love,
Me.

lilmissprincess

Very descriptive, and in that sense i like it.

cornbb

Very nice

Blush_01

I thought it was quite charming. I might drop a word from certain sentences in order to keep the rhythm intact, or else split the poem into stanzas so the reader can take a breath though, if it was me.

shiv

Lovely and sad. Well done.

worded

I really liked that, I agree though split it up to help the reader dream a little.

Paligulus

I really like it. When you look at the poem first you think, well why isnt this split up, but the rhythm really keeps it going. Favourite parts:

We’d a big storm last night
The rain madly flying
I think a new world was starting
And the old world was dying.

A sad man passed by me
Shoulders bent and head low
I think he tried to be happy
But just couldn’t, you know?

Argie

I have split it, I wrote it in one sitting which is why it kind of tumbled out like that but reading over it I agree that it should be split.

smcgiff

'A tree grows on the street
It looks for no attention
But it’s so calm and so placid
That it must get a mention.'

Most excellent - The above alone made the read worthwhile. It's a joy to come across writing that doesn't try too hard.