Writing Haiku

joe_dunne

Hi all

Has anyone ever tried writing Haiku?

It was a slow day in work so i had a try at a few.

They are written in the standard 3 line format with 5 syllables in the first line, 7 in the second and 5 in the last.

As ever any thoughts very much appreciated.



A thousand gazes,
Make the moon too sad to stay,
Oh the lucky sun!

Everyday flowers,
Wake up to say hi, hello.
Mostly i'm asleep.

Once a sunny day,
I think about my near death.
Down, down with thinking!

Punctuation free.
I scribble down my quick thoughts.
My Haiku don't rhyme.

I forgot to shave.
My face is obscured by hiar.
Time to steal stuff.

The sound the feeling,
Onomatoposia yes?
My pounding concience?

MagnumForce

joe_dunne wrote:

Everyday flowers,
Wake up to say hi, hello.
Mostly i'm asleep.

Punctuation free.
I scribble down my quick thoughts.
My Haiku don't rhyme.

I forgot to shave.
My face is obscured by hair.
Time to steal stuff.

I like these, especially the last.

Insect Overlord

1. A summer sunset
At the end February…
Then a winter’s night.

2. Embrace your talents.
Do not hide them from the world.
But do not show off!

3. Orange, fuchsia, red,
Amber, black, yellow, pink, gold.
A spectrum of fire.

4. Oh, the scary scenes!
Bizarre hallucinations!
Dreaming as I sleep…

5. Lying in the dark.
Nothing to do but think, write.
A sleepy poet…

Thursday*

A sheet of sunlight
Falls on the warm worn wood
And that is my home.

For once the virtue
Is in staring at the screen
Not healthy pursuits.

She asks me, scorning
You have but two pairs of shoes?
That's really funny.

I am free at last
Of colour-coded corridors
Joy should be me.

me-skywalker

joe_dunne wrote: »

A thousand gazes,
Make the moon too sad to stay,
Oh the lucky sun!

I like this.

Insect Overlord wrote: »

Embrace your talents.
Do not hide them from the world.
But do not show off!

Orange, fuchsia, red,
Amber, black, yellow, pink, gold.
A spectrum of fire.

I like these two, both completly different, yet punct and descriptive.

Here's my effort:

One more year smoke free.
Oh breathe deep my joyous lungs
fill with air and pride.

--Kaiser--

Tries to write Haiku
Attempts to add humour too
Fails miserably

Jimmy Iovine

We had to write a poem for a lecture last week. I started off trying to do a haiku but I gave up and opted for an acrostic poem. 8 words. The shorter the better.

We'll be writing a haiku and others in our lecture on Wednesday. Should be interesting.

Brian Lighthouse

Here`s my one and only attempt at a haiku:

Dear Father, I hear
You are sick. Get well soon Dad:
Miserable prick!
3 line haiku (17 syllables 5,7,5)