Lost Childhood

I wrote this years and years ago and only discovered it again recently. Thought it would be nice to be able to get peoples opinions on it. Think I wrote it when I was 14..

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When I was little,
Everything seemed so big.
That big branch,
Now looks like a twig.
Everything is so large,
Through the eyes of a child.
The worst pain ever felt,
Now seems so mild.
Everything was simple,
There were no woes.
As you get older,
Sadness is everything that goes.

My childhood is over,
It went by so fast.
When I sit alone,
I ask myself, "why didn’t it last?"
The days seems so much darker,
Than yesterday.
I wish it would come back,
And never go away.
My wishes are stupid,
I know that now.
The feeling inside me,
Is like sweat on a brow.

The innocence of a child,
I once held in the palm of my hand.
Now slips through my fingers,
Like grains of sand.
I would like to return,
To a land I once knew.
But now I realise,
It has disappeared like the morning dew.
The fog in my heart,
Now blurs my sight.
Everyday in my life now,
I must struggle, I must fight

Blush_01

It's really quite good for a kid, but the rhymes could be tweaked a little now that you have more experience. Solid foundation though.

Also - jesus!

DublinEvents

It does kinda seem that you tried a bit hard to make it rhyme so some places don't feel completely alright. It's not perfect but for a 14 year old, I would say it's excellent