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  • 19-10-2006 11:12pm
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    Anto and Moe
    Closed Accounts Posts: 202 ✭✭


    I'v been reading Only Revolutions and thought I'd try experementing vaguely with the style. Any thoughts, comments, criticisms, suggestions?

    I’m surprised – when you storm in here (guns blazing) – at your lack of ammunition.

    I’m vomburping bilebreath from an empty stomach, in a back-alley bar where so many dreamseeds never reached fruition.

    You lay down a sharp slap (snicketysmack!): offset me, upset me. Just what I needed.

    Of course, I’ve done nothing to you, done nothing to anyone.
    Because I can only do to myself.

    I’m self obsessed, with a loooooonging for flesh.
    And so, with this kiss (stalefresh), I betray yourself.


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