An Encore of Resignation

shiv

There are no holiday firecrackers in our backyards
This summer the intersecting street that links us is
Bereft of cars and our crossing

A path untraced by bare feet
Between safe suburban air conditioned doors
Alarm stickers stuck on glass notwithstanding
The the threat of another teenage arsonist on the prowl
Who eludes the circling police helicopter

For the fourth night in a row
I shut my eyes in this familiar shafted state
Sitting on the front step beside the bugs and the frog statue
Accepting the whims of the gods and wondering about you
And your latest unconfined catastrophe

Mairead-Mermaid

shiv wrote:

There are no holiday firecrackers in our backyards
This summer the intersecting street that links us is
Bereft of cars and our crossing

A path untraced by bare feet
Between safe suburban air conditioned doors
Alarm stickers stuck on glass notwithstanding
The the threat of another teenage arsonist on the prowl
Who eludes the circling police helicopter

For the fourth night in a row
I shut my eyes in this familiar shafted state
Sitting on the front step beside the bugs and the frog statue
Accepting the whims of the gods and wondering about you
And your latest unconfined catastrophe

Great poem, you have set the scene well, wondering what place inspired it!
I always find it hard to write poetry to a set assignment, for me poetry
comes only from my inner self, it has to be real. I can never project myself into a situation. Your poem seems real to me. I think "Wondering about you" doesn't seem to quite fit afterall you are in a "shafted state" , maybe something stronger here. Love it though!!

shiv

Mairead-Mermaid wrote:

Great poem, you have set the scene well, wondering what place inspired it!
I always find it hard to write poetry to a set assignment, for me poetry
comes only from my inner self, it has to be real. I can never project myself into a situation. Your poem seems real to me. I think "Wondering about you" doesn't seem to quite fit afterall you are in a "shafted state" , maybe something stronger here. Love it though!!

Thanks so much for your feedback Mairead-Mermaid! Really appreciate it!
I went home to Canada for a few weeks, so that was what inspired it...
I'm curious as to what you mean by 'set assignment'? I didn't have to project myself into anything as I was there...
I hear what you're saying about the 'wondering about you' line. It is kinda weak...But just because you've been shafted by someone doesn't mean you don't wonder about them, does it? I wish it did!
Thanks again for your response

Matt Holck

reminds me hiaku

combining a time, place and action

shiv

Matt Holck wrote:

reminds me hiaku

combining a time, place and action

Thanks Matt

Do you write many haikus yourself?