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Shadowed Street

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  • 22-07-2006 11:05pm
    #1
    homah_7ft
    Registered Users Posts: 6,121 ✭✭✭


    One shadow walks ahead on city street and people pass,
    Sun-glared eyes search round me while unseen I dream upon their faces,
    A sharp shaved man he shared a lie with Sandra over breakfast,
    He walks it off and now I meet three faces who want two,
    Their words chase to my ear and bite 'til blood on teeth appears,
    Hive numbers in front,
    My shadow turns behind.


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    #2
    shiv
    Closed Accounts Posts: 408 ✭✭shiv


    homah_7ft wrote:
    One shadow walks ahead on city street and people pass,
    Sun-glared eyes search round me while unseen I dream upon their faces,
    A sharp shaved man he shared a lie with Sandra over breakfast,
    He walks it off and now I meet three faces who want two,
    Their words chase to my ear and bite 'til blood on teeth appears,
    Hive numbers in front,
    My shadow turns behind.


    Interesting short piece. I like 'sun-glared eyes' and 'I dream up on their faces' particularly. Your punctuation and spacing are also unusual...


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    homah_7ft
    Registered Users Posts: 6,121 ✭✭✭homah_7ft


    Thanks Shiv. I'm glad you noticed the spacing.


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