Design Crit

Monkey

Which of these designs for a flyer do you prefer?

http://www.p-art-icles.com/front2.jpg
http://www.p-art-icles.com/front5.jpg

any feedback appreciated.

spidermonkey

is it also a theatre thing too?, cos if you removed the text those images communicate theatre.
the type in the first one looks like it was drawn in microsoft paint.(arial or helvetica?)
maybe considering that its a fine art exhibition why dont you draw or paint the enviroment/text as it might communicate fine art more
of the two though the second one(front5) looks best, it makes me curious about what the girl is doing on a stage, maybe even make me curious enough to go.

did you do both?

Karoma

front5 is better.

Monkey

The dressing room one was knocked together in a hurry in photoshop that's why the text looks crap. It'll be put together properly in Quark Xpress if it is to be used.

It's not a theatre thing too but the guy who's images they are makes work themed around the theatre. Not going to try and make the font look like it was painted or anything that's a bit too literal and we want to keep things simple.

I did both.

Shrimp

What an uninviting font..

Monkey

Ok the font's boring but there's no need to be snotty. You should grow up a bit and cop yourself on you sound like a kid. Here are two atempts at improvements.

http://www.p-art-icles.com/front6.jpg
http://www.p-art-icles.com/front7.jpg

spidermonkey

Monkey wrote:

You should grow up a bit and cop yourself on you sound like a kid.

first off the title of your post was "design crit", in the past when i've had my crits, sometimes my ideas and designs were ripped to sh*t infront of about 40-50 people. shrimp was just giving you his opinion, get used to it, its better that the problems are irioned out before it goes to print. if you cant take critisism your in the wrong business (assuming your doing art/design)

now back to the thread. front seven is much better, the only thing i might say is that you should remove the black box from behind the text, because when that has to be printed you'll be able to see it. i can also see some lines or something under some letters? and something that looks like fabric, which was probably part of the photo.
you should make "dit, fortland....june 12 -17" a bigger size because its more important.

CuLT

Monkey wrote:

Ok the font's boring but there's no need to be snotty. You should grow up a bit and cop yourself on you sound like a kid. Here are two atempts at improvements.

http://www.p-art-icles.com/front6.jpg
http://www.p-art-icles.com/front7.jpg

Can't take criticism? Don't ask for it.

There is no hostility implicit in Shrimp's reply.

Shrimp

relax, there was nothing wrong with what i said.

Monkey

It was sarcasm. it was unnecessary. The criticism was fine and i appreciate it. It's the attitude I don't like. He should have suggested I change the font not provided a dry comment.

CuLT

Monkey wrote:

It was sarcasm. it was unnecessary. The criticism was fine and i appreciate it. It's the attitude I don't like. He should have suggested I change the font not provided a dry comment.

You're not going to get far with an attitude like that. If "what an uninviting font" grinds your gears, you'd have some serious trouble with the other regulars who can be rather sharp.

Anyway, enough bellyaching from all.

cosgrove80

Monkey wrote:

Ok the font's boring but there's no need to be snotty. You should grow up a bit and cop yourself on you sound like a kid. Here are two atempts at improvements.

http://www.p-art-icles.com/front6.jpg
http://www.p-art-icles.com/front7.jpg

The changed font comes across as a bit "grungy".

Fine art would suggest a more classical font, almost a bit like caligraphy but clear and legible at the same time.

I was never great at typography but something like the attached could work:

ditsample.jpg

heggie

monkey, a bit of advice. if your sending these for print you're really working in the wrong format.

Monkey

The finished designs are done in Quark Xpress

heggie

with that in mind, the font will probably look fine shrimp, its just the fact that its not anti-aliased on the jpg that it looks bad.

forbairt

cosgrove80 wrote:

I was never great at typography but something like the attached could work:

ditsample.jpg

I quite like that ... but its reminding me of beer for some reason

X-SL

front6 is the best