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  • 15-05-2006 1:12am
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    solas
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    You don't smile anymore.
    I can still see
    beyond another closed door
    and no way to reach you,
    so many barriers in place.
    If I could still touch
    the tears rolling down your face,
    I would ease your heartache.


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    aliqueenb
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    how are u able to write ryming poems tell me!....its all right bit short maybe i dont know just didint, as they say touch me???...look at mine and give a comment???please....


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    BEAT
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    short and sweet solas, nice ;)


    aliqueenb, please try to form sentences that make sense in the future. You may want to try and read what you have typed before you click the submit button.


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    Outcast
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    It's nice, but I'd wonder about rhyming anymore with closed door. It's a bit too obvious.


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    Vulpine
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    That's all I can say...
    Well not really. I was totally taken at even a glimpse of what Solas' post was about. There's no point in saying that "It's a pity that we live in such a critical world..." because I'm critical myself, we all are, even with the best of intentions,...,BUT...to even form the lovely sentiment of what the poem is about & innocently volunteering, to even care about another person & perceptively feel for them so ...it obviously came from the heart. No posturing here.
    And so maybe I don't think critical analysis is as appropriate or relevant here.
    I feel it would be like looking the gift horse in the mouth.

    P.S. Oh fortunate person to be cared for so


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