stumble & fall.....

lu22

I just finished picking up the pieces from the floor,
when out of the silence comes a knock at my door
I open it up and there you stand
looking so different,
your heart in your hand

I hear the wind a warning me to stay on solid ground,
theres some thing in the way you move that leaves me lost & found,
and as i decide to stay off the train,
I'm pushed ahead by driving rain,

while the sun settles and dreams of us two,
the moon takes the stand & whispers what to do,
I won't let it push me like elements before,
I turn away and close the door

and as I think its over again,
I stumble & fall for you...
stumble
and
fall
for
you.....


feed back appreciated...

slinky

Good beat to it.

pisslips

lu22 wrote:

I hear the wind a warning me to stay on solid ground,
theres some thing in the way you move that leaves me lost & found,

Liked the first verse and this last bit but those two lines above^^, good god, I feel like your talkin about a great big tree.I like "wind a warning". In fact the more I read it the more I like it.

lu22 wrote:

and as I think its over again,
I stumble & fall for you...
stumble
and
fall
for
you.....

That was cool the way the beat,"stumbled"(Am I over-anylising here?)It was good though, personally I'd like to edit;
And as I think it's over,
again I stumble,
stumble
and
fall
for
you

lu22

thanks pisslips, i actually like what your saying about
again i stumble,
stumble
and
fall
for
you..
the feed back is much appriciated, thanks a mill..
i have to admit i didnt like the two lines you pointed out, I didn't think it mixed well but at the same time, i was quite happy with it as a whole,
thanks again !