The Nature of Bliss

shiv

Stop typing at me that way
All punchy forceful eloquence
Preceding one-syllable
Silence
In the span of a day

Am I the food fallen on the keys
Crumbs stuffed in between your
Sporadic savage sweetness and
Abrupt about-face

Don’t you know I’m the youngest in the office
The oldest every other place
I create

Have you heard my handwriting
Seen my tone of voice
Full-screen frontal lobe
Identity theft

A common avatar
A Hindu god
A sharp weapon
All that is left

TheVerBal1

shiv wrote:

Stop typing at me that way
All punchy forceful eloquence
Preceding one-syllable
Silence
In the span of a day

Am I the food fallen on the keys
Crumbs stuffed in between your
Sporadic savage sweetness and
Abrupt about-face

Don’t you know I’m the youngest in the office
The oldest every other place
I create

Have you heard my handwriting
Seen my tone of voice
Full-screen frontal lobe
Identity theft

A common avatar
A Hindu god
A sharp weapon
All that is left

I found this unusually hard to interprete... I really like the opening and thrid stanza, my own interpretation was that U were talking about ur writting and how U need people to see ur writting to actually "see" you... Im probly wrong...

It made me think ALOT...

enjoyed it

shiv

TheVerBal1 wrote:

I found this unusually hard to interprete... I really like the opening and thrid stanza, my own interpretation was that U were talking about ur writting and how U need people to see ur writting to actually "see" you... Im probly wrong...

It made me think ALOT...

enjoyed it

Hey TheVerBal1, thanks for your comments, they're greatly appreciated!
After I posted this poem I worried it might be a bit too "coded" or hard to interpret, as you wrote. Your theory is partially right--in this case the power of writing and words between people, what happens when those words stop or go away, and how they can reveal secret clues of who we are when exchanged freely.

Towards the end I got sort of caught up in the notion of simply being reduced to a name, an avatar, or persona on a computer (i.e. shiv--hindu god), and how this ironically diminishes the feeling of intimacy originally felt.

TheVerBal1

Cool... I like it... I get ye now...


Seen my tone of voice
Full-screen frontal lobe


Much more powerfull now that uv explained it...

BEAT

wonderful, as usual